What Went Down Last Night
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Liner Notes:
SuperSkirmish C
SS092421C
DATE/TIME: September 24 - 8pm CDT (6pm PDT, 9pm EDT, 2am BST, 3am CEST, September 25: 11am AEST etc...)
THEME/TITLE: Last Night (or around that idea)
TAGS: superskirmish, songskirmish, ss092421c, feast,
WHAT: We will have a one hour skirmish to write to a prompt.*
HOST: @coolparadiso
Sorry, I'm a little late. I am not loving what I wrote, but it's done.
Lyrics:
What Went Down Last Night
Woke up this morning
With a pounding in my head
A piercing on my lip
In a strange guy's bed
My brain is spinning
But the details are a blur
Tequila shots aren't meant
For an amateur
What went down last night
I wish I only knew
What went down last night
A serious mistake
Or carefree rendezvous
Time for a decision
Should I do the walk of shame
Or stay and make the coffee
Find out this guys name
My love life has been
In a steady rocky state
Maybe hooking up last night
Was the work of fate
What went down last night
I wish I only knew
What went down last night
A serious mistake
Or carefree rendezvous
The best place to start
If I'm hoping for romance
Is by putting on my shirt and pants
Then I'll make the coffee
Please keep your comments respectful, honest, and constructive. Please focus on the song and not the demo.
Comments
I really like your title, and great take on the prompt (I went this direction as well!). I so relate to things like "brain is spinning" and "details are a blur." Good writing!
I actually love the story you've told here (mainly because it did not happen to me, lol) and you've included great details. Lip piercing?? OUCH!! I went down a similar avenue with the prompt, as did @tjeff. I actually feel like our three songs could be a trilogy!
Must be that tequila again. Lost days and list nights. Good observational lyric.
This telling of a last night is cute. Not quite the regrets of some of the other entries. I like that you are going to try to make the best of it even if it is a mistake.
The first two stanzas are really strong, the second line of the chorus is off, I would swap the words around to 'I only wish I knew', and I would use this line as a repeat 4th line.
This is so funny! You pull me in with that little twist in the first verse and the second verse made me just laugh! And the shirt and pants line before the coffee is priceless! Reminds me a little of my college days! I wish I were a better musician- I would jump on this!
I was chuckling all through this, but "Tequila shots aren't meant / For an amateur" made me laugh out loud. This reminds me of Scorsese's very under-rated movie "After Hours" where Griffin Dunne has the same sort of night...
Very interesting, vivid lyrics and images. Amazing work.