Not Quite Right
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Lyrics:
Not Quite Right
I've got this funny feeling
Something's not quite right
You've been working on the weekends
Late most every night
I've got a funny feeling
Something's not quite right
Don't want to find out later
That my suspicions were all true
It's time to play detective
And search for hidden clues
First I check the pockets
Of clothes left laying on the floor
Not even sure I'll notice
What it is I'm looking for
Maybe a slip of paper
with a number or a name
Incriminating evidence
To substantiate my claim
I've got this funny feeling
Something's not quite right
You've been working on the weekends
Late most every night
I've got a funny feeling
Something's not quite right
I rummage through your dresser
The chest under the bed
That's were I found the pictures
I'll never get out of my head
Arms tight around each other
A sparkle in your eye
But what really threw me was
Your lover was a guy
I had a funny feeling
Turns out I was right
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Comments
These lyrics really pull the reader in and brings them through the story. Strong work
Good storytelling here! You took us along for the ride. I particularly liked the chorus.
Enjoyed this.. it's a great story. Liked the rhymes!
A twist inside a twist, clever writing. I like the notion of that 'funny feeling'. Always trust your gut instincts. An ingenious tale of betrayal.
Very well written lyric that is sadly the kind of detective work people often feel a need to do … you did a great job with the details - succinct but superb in setting the scene and capturing the perspective of the main character. Great twist at the end.
Excellent writing. Great twist at the end.
Fantastic work for a one hour challenge. You tell a really good story here. I like the details you set out regarding all the checking and investigating.
Very cool story telling and take on the skirmish prompt.
LOL! That made me laugh out loud. Very well crafted lyric, and a nice twist at the end!
nicely done, with that twist ending...
Great lyric... reads well, will make a catchy tune, Love the twist in the end! Smiling as I write! LOL
KC
Great writing with a twist!
Good storytelling and twist. very well written.
OOOH! I love this! A real story song with an unexpected twist! Very nice! What an imagination! Great rhyming.
Thanks, too, Andrea, for your comments on You Take Me There. I appreciate the listen.
Wow, I thought I knew where this was going and you did a great job catching me off guard. This is a very well written so smart. Great work, especially considering it was a skirmish.