Goodbye

Goodbye

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Feast

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WHEN: Monday Skirmish August 2, 2021 8pm BST, 3pm EDT, 2pm CT, 12noon PDT

TITLE/THEME PROMPT: Savage

TAGS: skirmish, songskirmish, s080921, feast, savage
WHAT: We will have a one hour skirmish to write to a prompt.*
HOST: @wacha

Whelp, this one got away from me. I picked the prompt and planned on writing a really dark song, the first verse was supposed to be the set up for something very sinister. Then things took a turn and what I was coming up with was more of a loss/break up type song. I learned form last week to just go with it. So I wrote like a 90s girl pop rock song maybe?

I've been in a funk lately, and really feeling the effects relationships that have either ended or don't feel as important to the other person as they do to me. So I guess that's where this came form.

Anyway, I enjoyed this one. It felt catchy as I was writing it and was a lot of fun, so much fun that broke out the cajon and shaker which I played in the same take because I didn't want to have to spend 6 minutes recording them when I could do it 3 and I didn't need them in the same parts. That lead some wonky bits for both the them which really wasn't helped by not recording initially to a click but if I had I wouldn't have had time to add anything else. I would probably have wrapped that chorus around 1 more time at the end had I thought it out more.

Oh and there's a pre chorus, I almost never to those.

Lyrics: 

Verse: G5 C5 am
Pre Chorus: em C D
Chorus: G C em D

Verse:
Never saw it coming
Now I'm off and running
Thought it couldn't be
But now I'm free

Pre Chorus:
I saw that look in your eye
No choice but to say goodbye

Chorus:
Goodbye
To the savagery
We left behind
Goodbye
To all the wickedness
And the lies
Goodbye

Verse:
It was so hard
To walk away
Knowing I'd miss
The day to day

Pre Chorus:
Always seemed to hard to try
Never dreamed I'd be the one to say goodbye

Chorus:
Goodbye
To the savagery
We left behind
Goodbye
To all the wickedness
And the lies
Goodbye

Verse:
Looking back on what we've been through
Feels like a lot more than me and you

Pre Chorus:
Didn't come to crucify
But we both know it's time to say goodbye

Chorus:
Goodbye
To the savagery
We left behind
Goodbye
To all the wickedness
And the lies
Goodbye



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Comments

Marilisa's picture

It really is catchy, and excellent work on the percussion multitasking! Smile I love the structure of the lyrics, especially the pre-choruses that echo each other, and the music works so well with them. I'm glad you went with the flow, and maybe the sinister song is waiting for the right moment to pop out!

Nice! The opening growl reminds me of Janis Joplin, Need more of this! You’re awesome!

Serene's picture

It's beautiful. I love the way you sing it . Your voice is pure, raw and vulnerable.. it feels authentic. Well done

tjeff's picture

Sounds great! Such an excellent take on the prompt too. I enjoyed ready how the song evolved away from what you had originally intended. Great energy and drive, I really enjoying listening to your stuff!

Sunfire's picture

Great sounding tune. Vocals, guitar, the lyric and what I believe is a shaker in the background.

coolparadiso's picture

Classic wacha to my ear! And that for me is good. The progression has a lovely cycle. Very good song!

Valerie Cox's picture

That is a great time! I absolutely love the chorus. The savagery and wickedness. That’s fantastic. Wonderful images and great words. I gonna need to download this one. It’s one I see myself listening to a lot.

Wolf Kier's picture

Another great skirmish song from you. It's still a mystery how you do it again and again.
The savagery and wickedness in a song lyric wins the internet today! Smile
Another one for the "be sure to polish and develop" keepers list for you! Well done.

mike skliar's picture

this is really wonderful, feels fully formed and , skirmish or not, its really impressive!

kahlo's picture

Fantastic skirmish! Love your guitar/shaker/melody combination. Great vocals delivering the wonderfully crafted biting lyric! Strong chorus!

Gm7's picture

Wonderful skirmish. great chorus Catherine.

Great, deep, effecting lyric.

- It reminds me of a person in my life, and "why" they do what they do; - rather than handling it another way, they "blew it up". I learned then, quick, and would say when would see this trait some use, and would say, - "so, this is heading to this [conclusion] ?, let's skip the agony and just do it".

Well, in my words, not yours, but thought you might find that effect in another's mind, interesting, from hearing a song, your song. (I would Fool hahhh!)

Jerry Pettit's picture

So I'm not the only one that starts writing an "upbeat" song and ends up with the opposite--or vice versa. Sometimes the song just wants to take you somewhere else.

Your usual great driving guitar and wonderful vocal. And I do love the lyrics--very catchy chorus!

dzd's picture

I really love this. While maybe not what you inteded to write it came out excellent. There's a bittersweet, but uplifting feel to the whole thing that I think the recording just enhances. As someone who only knows how to do wonky percussion I found this excellent. I didn't notice anything "off" but also wasn't listening for it. It all sounds great to me. The switchup between cajon and shaker is nice too. I think its the no BS matter-of-factness about the lyric I find uplifting as it's really not a happy song.