Look

Look

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Music added

Lyrics for now in response to the skirmish. With bst this was 5.am just too early. But waiting for my wife at the dentist this cane to me and flowed out in 10-15 minutes. I may musicate when i am home.

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Lyrics: 

Look

I don’t want to look
I don’t want to see
I don’t want these bonds
I want to be free

I don’t want this pain
I don’t want these ties
I don’t want this love
Based on your lies

I don’t want a fortune
I don’t want no fame
I don’t need you all
To know my name

I don’t need to be rich
I don’t need no mansion
I don’t need to be clever
But my mind needs expansion

I don’t want your body
I don’t want your love
I don’t want intervention
From up above

I don’t want to look
I don’t want to see
I dont want these bonds
I want to be free

I dont want this pain
I dont want these ties
I dont want this love
Based on your lies

I don’t want to see
I just want to be free



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Comments

Chip Withrow's picture

I hope you do set this to music. I think the tendency with this prompt would be to write about what you should look for, and yours is quite the opposite. The economy of words packs an emotional punch.

JWHanberry's picture

Reads like it would almost sing itself. Put one of your trademark rhythm sections behind it and you're set to go. Good job.

wacha's picture

Great set of lyrics here, I look forward to seeing where you take them musically.

OdilonGreen's picture

Dark and bitter? Or uplifting and ultimately hopeful that tomorrow will be better? I can "hear" these intriguing words go either way, and look forward to actually hearing which way you go if you do decide to add music!

JWHanberry's picture

That's what I'm talkin' about. :You made a fine track.

musicsongwriter's picture

Beautiful, sweet song. A pleasure to listen to. A lovely take on a skirmish prompt.

wacha's picture

Thanks for the heads up on the arrangement. I really love where you took this one musically, there is a really nice, laid back feel which works well with the lyircs.

JamKar's picture

There is a rolling rhythm already present here. Like a train heralding the music to come.

Edward Roussac's picture

I like how almost all of the lyrics begin the same; with "I". Repetition drives the point home.
I like the imagery in the lyrics. The song is very relaxing to listen to!

Amanda West's picture

This is really sweet, and I mean that in a very good way. The presentation fits the lyric and it just flows, as do the words Smile

cola's picture

This song flows so smoothly, the repetition of "I don't want/need" at the beginning of each line is really effective. I certainly enjoyed my listen - great work!

Chip Withrow's picture

Thanks for letting me know about the demo. I love the wistful, nostalgic feel - you do that so well.

OdilonGreen's picture

Came back to listen again now that music has been added. I like the tender, 50s-ish, almost romantic feel, a lovely serenade to the concept of freedom regaining one's independence.

Zeekle's picture

There’s an instant rhythm when you read these. The music has a nice easy listening feel. Very gentle on the ears.

Rob Lincoln's picture

This has a really strong 50's ballad flavor which is very refreshing as so few people write that way anymore and when they do it is really bad. But this is good. Very enjoyable! The keyboards sound like background harmonies, or are they background harmonies that sound like keyboards? Either way,-- very cool!

jeustan's picture

I can certainly relate. These are the things I think when advertisements are forced on me—leave me alone please, I wanna be free. I like what you've done here.

greengrassgirl's picture

I really liked this song. The message, the tone, your vocal, the impossible-to-forget melody. I tried sending you an EM through the site, and copied myself. I haven't received that copy yet, so I don't know if you got the EM.