My Favorite Vice

My Favorite Vice

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SuperSkirmish I

DATE/TIME: September 24 - 8pm CDT (6pm PDT, 9pm EDT, 2am BST, 3am CEST, September 25: 11am AEST etc...)

THEME/TITLE: This is an assignment! Do it in order; don't skip ahead! :p
1. Grab a random item from your kitchen.
2. Bring it to your songwriting station.
3. Your prompt is your object, any inspiration that comes from it; have fun with this! Smile

WHAT: We will have a one hour skirmish to write to a prompt.*
HOST: @unpronounceable

Since it's been 2-for-1 day with prompts around here, I decided to combine this skirmish with our Tuesday Night Music Club challenge of "frying pan/ice". Just a fun little pop tune about dysfunctional relationships.

Lyrics: 

You're hot as a frying pan
Then cold as ice
Never know what's coming
Always got me looking twice
Am I getting burned
Or are you playing nice
All I know is that you're still
My favorite vice

I see you coming, I can feel the heat
You're body's on fire but I can't retreat
So turn it up while we get down
I'm stoking the flames
Don't care who's around

And you got me going to extremes

You're hot as a frying pan
Then cold as ice
Never know what's coming
Always got me looking twice
Am I getting burned
Or are you playing nice
All I know is that you're still
My favorite vice

I feel your chill and I have to doubt
If we're so good together
Why are you freezing me out
Like a glacier retreating away
I'm getting frostbite
From the games that you play

And you got me going to extremes

You're hot as a frying pan
Then cold as ice
Never know what's coming
Always got me looking twice
Am I getting burned
Or are you playing nice
All I know is that you're still
My favorite vice

So unpredictable
Your highs and lows
Icicle or inferno
One never knows

And you got me going to extremes

You're hot as a frying pan
Then cold as ice
Never know what's coming
Always got me looking twice
Am I getting burned
Or are you playing nice
All I know is that you're still
My favorite vice

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Comments

kenmattsson's picture

Nice write on here Rayna. I like what you've done with balancing the lyrics, and bringing the frying pan and ice metaphors in different verses. Good job.

tcelliott's picture

I like starting with the chorus, and it's a strong one. I had trouble with the prompt but you made it seem so appropriate to use it in a relationship song. I do not think I could have done that.

dzd's picture

I really like the structure of this write with the hook always circling back around and remaining the prominent feature. As writers we(I use we in the loosest terms here, I haven't been writing much lately, and have never considered myself a lyrisict) tend to get too wordy, though that's strictly a matter of taste and subjectivity as it all is. Coming from mostly a live music background who the hell hears the lyrics in a loud venue when we tend to sweat and toil over each word, I know I never do Biggrin Really great write!

richaaaay's picture

That is a very clever way to incorporate frying pan and ice into a song. Works super well. Impressive, expressive and just plain well done.

mike skliar's picture

what a great idea, and you sailed thru all the way giving it a unique spin with every line! really nicely done!!!

kahlo's picture

Wonderful concept and really well executed! I love the contrasts from the concrete to the abstract! Punchy, pointed and fun!

elesimo's picture

This is great, Rayna! Such a strong first verse, I loved the beginning and end: "You're hot as a frying pan / Then cold as ice / All I know is that you're still / My favorite vice". Amazing take on the prompt, I love it!