You're a Wild Thing

You're a Wild Thing

wacha's picture
Feast

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WHEN: Monday Skirmish September 13, 2021 8pm BST, 3pm EDT, 2pm CT, 12noon PDT

THEME/TITLE: Wild Things (could be a wild party, a feral animal, anything wild)

TAGS: skirmish, songskirmish, s091321, feast, whildthings
WHAT: We will have a one hour skirmish to write to a prompt.*
HOST: @wacha

I again struggled with my own prompt. I started on the ukulele, then was going to do an electronic instrumental but tried the guitar. I wrote a verse and part of a chorus for another song but hated that o I stopped and started working on this. I was going to a Cowboy Junkies(The Trinity Sessions) feel with this and I think I kind of got that.

I knew going into this I was tired and probably really should not participate but get some rest and almost walked away halfway through starting this song. I think by the time I started actually working on this it was around 3:15 or so so I got it done pretty quick but I think structurally it's a bit of a problem, the last verse has a lot more more than the first two but I liked it and couldn't really edit quickly. So I guess if I keep this one I'll have to say more in the beginning?

Lyrics: 

Verse: am dm am em
Chorus: C G C am G

Verse:
You
Took off
Not
Even a why
I couldn't
Hold you
Never
Even tried

Chorus:
You're a wild thing
That I can't tame
If I tried
I'd go insane
There's nothing left
For us to save
You just drove off
Alone that day

Verse:
I
Just
couldn't
Believe
You
Left me
Hear
To grieve

Chorus:
You're a wild thing
That I can't tame
If I tried
I'd go insane
There's nothing left
For us to save
You just drove off
Alone that day

Verse:
We should
Have been forever
But I'm
Left here all alone
I don't know
What to do
My heart's broken
I can't live without you

Chorus:
You're a wild thing
That I can't tame
If I tried
I'd go insane
There's nothing left
For us to save
You just drove off
Alone that day



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Comments

vivalarayna's picture

Glad you stuck with this! I like how much room to breathe you gave the lyrics. If you wanted to add to the second verse, you could, but perhaps consider keeping it still sparse. It's effective in that the listener really is hanging on every word. The third verse does not feel "too much". Love the chorus and the overall flow. Hope you can get a nap and feel better!

cindyrella's picture

Short lines and your talent sure makes a sensational song!

Wolf Kier's picture

The vox sound great, That "not even a why" reminded me of the freddy song, that's actually a good thing, b/c I though that would make a great recurring hook in a string of songs or even a great name for an album. There's the pain of parting and the real feel of a country bluesy almost swampy "place". Sounding out a "place" in a song isn't easy unless it's instinctive or "in the bones". , but its a great because it's means you're evoking something more than the sum of the lyric/music.

Kristi's picture

I like how the one word lines sit there on our minds as the story is told. It all beckons emotions to surface while listening to your tone of voice and the guitar. Gives us time to reflect. It didn't bother my ears to have more words in that last verse. In fact, I think it adds to the emotion but you can always play with it. Vocal and guitar sound great. Good you didn't give up!

mike skliar's picture

This is really wonderful! I just did this skirmish, very late, and i really like your 'trinity sessions' take here! love the way each word is phrased with all that space and the whole thing comes together really well.

kahlo's picture

Love your vocals on this and the emotion that comes through with a longing and sense of loss. Great use of the prompt. It is sad but relatable - some of the untamed wildness that attracts us is also the untamed wildness that leads to the wanderlust that kills a relationship. You nail that feeling well for me. Love the guitar music and groove too!

crisp1's picture

Your voice sounds so smooth and there's a lot of great space in between the words, which gives it a wide open feel. Really nice melody, too.

musicsongwriter's picture

What a beautiful song! How did I manage to only find it now??? Your vocals are gorgeous. So beautiful and go straight into my heart. Such a beautiful music. Singing and playing are in a great harmony. Great take on the skirmish prompt. So poignant!