You'll Never Sleep Again

You'll Never Sleep Again

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When: Wednesday Skirmish September 1, 2021 8pm BST, 3pm EDT, 2pm CT, 12noon PDT

Theme: Sleep (since I didn't get any due to the apocalyptic storms that moved through with the remnants of Ida last night).

Tags: skirmish, songskirmish, s090121, feast, sleep

What: We will have a one hour skirmish to write to a prompt.*

Host: @vivalarayna

I've done a few murder ballads, so this time I decided to focus on the perspective of "the other side", with a murderee who vows their revenge and haunts TF out of the one who did them in. This was fun to write. Maybe *too* much fun, lol! Enjoy!

NOTE: I meant to add that I tried using Lyric Cloud for the first time with this. Couldn't get all the words in, but probably more than 50%. I'll definitely use that tool again!

Lyrics: 

VERSE 1
I felt the pillow on my face
I knew it was your hands
Gripping the case
Felt my body start to thrash
In desperation
My fingers flailed and scratched

VERSE 2
But you were too strong
To resist
I fell limp in
Death's hallowed mist
And although my
Mortal shell is gone
My betrayed soul
Cannot move on

CHORUS
Demons laugh and angels weep
My cold body lies
Somewhere in the deep
As long as I'm bound
To haunt this earthly plane
I swear to God
You'll never sleep again

VERSE 3
I am the bitterness in your wine
I'm the cold chill that
Runs down your spine
I'm the face you glimpse
In the hallway mirror
I am the tell-tale heart
That beats ever nearer

CHORUS
Demons laugh and angels weep
My cold body lies
Somewhere in the deep
As long as I'm bound
To haunt this earthly plane
I swear to God
You'll never sleep again

BRIDGE
I am the creaking of the floor
I am the rush of air
That slams the door
The hair standing on your neck
I am the ghost of your regret
The lights flickering on your street
The clammy hand under your sheet
I am the ever-present rotting smell
I'll be the one
Drags you down to Hell

VERSE 4
I watch your body
Start to shrink
Your bloodshot eyes
Even further sink
I can now tell it won't be long
Tonight you'll hear
The Reaper's song

CHORUS
Demons laugh and angels weep
My cold body lies
Somewhere in the deep
As long as I'm bound
To haunt this earthly plane
I swear to God
You'll never sleep again

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Comments

tjeff's picture

Love the idea of revenge on the murderer. Not sure where I stand on the issue of ghosts, but if they do exist, then this is one of the more logical places for a spirit to come back and take there revenge. I like the chorus a lot, the 1st line really drew me in. Also excellent moving of the story along in your verses.

Sunfire's picture

Wow that was powerful and good. Revenge with venom for sure. lol Very well written and detailed to even haunt the reader.

musicsongwriter's picture

Powerful and vivid write. Great idea. Thank you for your beautiful prompt.

kahlo's picture

This is deliciously dark and revengeful. I love the unique point of view! Really vivid and very creepy and wonderful!

wacha's picture

Wow, I thought I went dark but you took dark to a whole new level and I love it! This is a GREAT dark, murder song. It's well crafted and feels like something that would have taken longer than an hour to get to. The imagery is clear, it feels like you are narrating a horror movie, well done!