The Setup

The Setup

mikehex's picture
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THEME/TITLE: "DETECTIVE" - Use in your lyric, your title. Maybe you have to figure out something, other than a crime!

Lyrics: 

I’ll seek you out
It might take a day or two
To find that trace that pricks at the mind
like the lingering scent of a familiar perfume

Your final redoubt
Far from the common view
I’ll locate your sanctuary
Your hidden room within a room

I’ll get a shot of you laughing, living high
Not a worry in the world, sure the wells run dry

I’ll pick apart all the secrets you thought secure
I’ll find pieces of the puzzle in places obvious and obscure

I’ll open your heart, no line of inquiry premature
When we open our deliberations, the evidence will be sure

By the time you know to worry, I’ll be pacing, no hurry
Too late for you to clear up tracks
I’m close to my final attack
Filling in the corners of the map
While you believe

You can breathe easy, because you know I play by rules
You can breathe easy, thinking I’m nowhere close to you
You can breathe easy, because you know you’re being chased by fools
You can breathe easy, unaware of all my tools
You can breathe easy, sure of what I would and wouldn’t do
You can breathe easy, thinking I won’t bend the rules

But
You’ve pushed your luck too far
I know just what you are and
It’s personal this time
I’m going to repay all your crimes



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Comments

vivalarayna's picture

Fun! I like the angle you took on this and the storytelling of the detective setting the target up I a sting. You had me hooked with the "like the lingering scent of a familiar perfume" line. Good descriptive language throughout.

kahlo's picture

Unique revengeful perspective with so many great lines - although you never convey exactly what the crime was I find myself feeling that the revenge is well deserved. I like the choppy strum pattern you used for this as it adds movement and anticipation that fit the lyrics so well. Loved this set of lines:
I’ll pick apart all the secrets you thought secure
I’ll find pieces of the puzzle in places obvious and obscure
I’ll open your heart, no line of inquiry premature
When we open our deliberations, the evidence will be sure
Great job with the skirmish!

Sunfire's picture

I like the intensity in the guitar with the breathe easy lines. Really well done. Target and attack.

Roddy's picture

Very dramatic with lots of tension. The change at the bridge is very effective and sounds really good. I like your guitar playing it serves the lyrics very well.

Zeekle's picture

This has a real sinister, revengeful feel, and I loved it. Gritty lyrics and always pushing the point that you have tracked this person down and now it's time for payback. I get a picture of Liam Neeson on the phone saying "I will find you..." in my head. The Bridge is brilliantly done too, take everything back a notch and then picks up with the angst. Fantastic take on the prompt.

corinne54's picture

Some really well crafted lyrics here, and the music complements the the words so well. Bravo

musicsongwriter's picture

Dramatic, intense and intriguing. Very interesting song and take on the prompt.

mike skliar's picture

wow, this is really impressive, creepy, and effective. Love the way the narrator says 'you know i play by rules' and then it morphs into 'thinking i won't bend the rules'. This is a character study and the music and performance really support the lyric and amplify the whole thing- great job!!!

AndreaB's picture

I love how the music adds a feel of anxious tension. This detective has a that determined tenacious attitude, and a bit of an ego to boot. He/she is made for the movies! Super enjoyable!

wacha's picture

I love the feel of this one, there's a lot of tension and mystery. You're vocals have a bit of David Byrne on the delivery especially on the bridge. Really nice use of the prompt, good skirmishing.