Eternity

Eternity

StevieJ's picture

Demo: 

Liner Notes: 

when I met my partner we lived far away and are now living together after surviving the distance. I wrote this song about that situation moving into today's current situation. any feedback would be great.

https://soundcloud.com/user-586564289/et2-mp3

Lyrics: 

https://soundcloud.com/user-586564289/et2-mp3

Intro
I was looking for something new
I've never met someone like you
an effortless beauty
who can light up a room
just like you do, just like you do

Verse 1
Every minute that passed
I'd think of you
and wonder what your up to
sitting in my home
I'd feel so alone until I see your face
through the screen on my phone

Chorus
I can feel it when you look at me
this is the start of our love story
all I want to do is continue to read
and hope that it lasts for eternity
I hope that it lasts for eternity

Verse 2
I was living so far away
craving your touch each and every day
speaking on the phone
is all we could do
and god knows, no one can talk like you

Chorus
I can feel it when you look at me
this is the start of our love story
all I want to do is continue to read
and hope that it lasts for eternity
I hope that it lasts for eternity

Verse 3
now I'm exactly where i want to be
waking up each day with you next to me
making memories to turn the page
let's stay together until the end of our days

Bridge
cause your all that i want
all I could ever need
i love all of you and I can feel it too when you look at me

Chorus
I can feel it when you look at me
this is the start of our love story
all I want to do is continue to read
and hope that it lasts for eternity
I hope that it lasts for eternity



Please keep your comments respectful, honest, and constructive. Please focus on the song and not the demo.

Comments

KateStantonSings's picture

The guitar from the beginning is catchy and cool. I bet your partner loved this gorgeous and thoughtful melody! Well done!

msculli1's picture

Its a fine tune and beautiful story. The love shines through in the song. Good stuff.

Chip Withrow's picture

Had to hear another of your songs! Such a catchy guitar/percussion groove, and another winning vocal performance. Passionate, sincere - super cool song!

ustaknow's picture

Great lyric, - you're holding back vocally, which, (not knowing you at all), which if you did not could push this past just a "demo" regardless of "Production" (how produced, DAW'd, recorded).

I saw your message about the Rap Track and felt, first, - I'd need to see other work first, - context. Also, what's your background, experience, other. Folks, new, old to SR'g have various reactions to input, how, why, what.