The Man Who Can't Sleep

The Man Who Can't Sleep

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Liner Notes: 

First skirmish. No, the character in the writing is not me. Lol But, I did meet someone once that claimed this. Nice guy, bright but hyperactive as hell.

* Energy bunny in the lyric was a commercial on TV a number of years ago with a battery operated wind up rabbit that beat a drum. It was used to advertise the endurance, energy, and longevity I believe of Energizer batteries.

Lyrics: 

The Man Who Can't Sleep

I once met a guy
Who says he can only sleep
Two hours a night
And he scares the sheep
Away from his dreams
Cause he's always awake
He's a hyperactive Charlie
Who often has a headache

He's the man who can't sleep
More than an hour or two
You may think that sounds crazy
But to him it's not new
He'd give the Energizer Bunny
A real heart attack
His mind is a mess
But he's never smoked crack

The very same guy
Has tried everything to keep
His mind from racing
Faster than a jeep
Doctors are baffled
Medicine doesn't work
His energy level's soaring
Brain is like a firework

He's the man who can't sleep
More than an hour or two
You may think that sounds crazy
But to him it's not new
He'd give the Energizer Bunny
A real heart attack
His mind is a mess
But he's never smoked crack

Odd thing is when he sleeps
His eyes never shut
And he breathes through his mouth
Yeah, he must be a nut

He's the man who can't sleep
More than an hour or two
You may think that sounds crazy
But to him it's not new
He'd give the Energizer Bunny
A real heart attack
His mind is a mess
But he's never smoked crack



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Comments

cindyrella's picture

That's not much sleep! I had horrible insomnia one so bad I started to hallucinate. I really love the subject and flow!

dzd's picture

I can relate to this poor fellow, unless I'm taking something......drink/drugs I'm lucky to get 2-3 hours at once, but not the open eyes bit hahah that's terrifying I have seen it Smile eyes rolled back in the head.....it's pretty scary.
Won't say I've never smoked crack, I won't lie hahah, but yeah that's not a factor..... uppers for most have the opposite effect, I'm ready to sit down and just stare at a wall like a zombie.....so you can keep your ADHD meds thanks, but no thanks doc Biggrin

yeah really nice read/flow to this in a quick read, great skirmish! excellent first one!

johnstaples's picture

Wow, you do a terrific job of describing this poor fellow! Lots of really nice, descriptive lines here but my favorite is "And he scares the sheep / Away from his dreams"! Did you say this was your first skirmish? You really did a great set of lyrics for a skirmish! Nice work!!

Zeekle's picture

Very cool. I remember the Energiser bunny adds, Very descriptive lines. “Brain is like a firework”. I can relate to that. A really great write for the prompt.

corinne54's picture

Ha! This is a fun lyric and so glad you joined in on the skirmish!

barbara's picture

A fine character sketch, with great rhymes and flow. I really like the lines “You May think that sounds crazy / But to him it’s not new” and the way they close that quatrain.
Glad you tried skirmishing! I hope you liked it!

Roddy's picture

Good writing, there are so many great ideas here. I really like 'And he scares the sheep
Away from his dreams'

coolparadiso's picture

sorry i missed this earlier! great flow to this - great picture painting of a character and a situation. nice skirmish