Bright Star

Bright Star

corinne54's picture
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What’s that object shining
So high above?
Jupiter? Venus? An evening star?
Will it bring me love?

I would ask the Fates
To deliver my heart’s desire
Would they listen to my prayers
And lift my spirits higher?

You are my bright star
When I plunge into darkness
You are my bright star
When I stare at the starkness
And fall down down down
You pull me out and surround
Me with light
Please be my bright star tonight

So much in life
Can make one forlorn
Things you wish you’d said and done
Missed chances to mourn

But you are my bright star
When I plunge into darkness
You are my bright star
When I stare at the starkness
And fall down down down
You pull me out and surround
Me with light
Please be my bright star tonight



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Comments

dzd's picture

This is really sweet! and somehow same time sad or more just the questioning of it I guess, not necessarily sad as it is hopeful..........ugh now I'm an emotional wreck! hahah, kidding..... really nice write! well done!

Kristi's picture

Good, thoughtful words and a hopeful message. I was thinking along the same lines when doing mine. I like the power and energy you focus on with "light".

tjeff's picture

Nice hopeful and uplifting message, admitting imperfections and accepting help - love it.

kahlo2013's picture

This is really fabulous! I really love this you developed this. The chorus is really beautiful in its sentiment and structure. It feels so loving and sincere.

I feel a little more of the sadness dzd mentions. For me its that one someone/something that is that bright star in the darkness/starkness. The fact that the darkness exists in the first place, whatever form it takes, and the desperation of reaching out to that lone bit of brightness... That hits me in a different way. And relating it to a star, something so far away that we'll never reach.
Maybe I'm just a sadsack.
Either way, it evoked feeling and reflection, which is what great lyrics should do.

Marilisa's picture

I really love the structure and rhythm of the chorus - I'm hearing sort of torch-songy, though that might not be what you had in mind at all! Lovely set of lyrics.

johnstaples's picture

This is a really lovely set of lyrics Corinne! Really strong chorus. This prompt resonated with me as my wife and I have been going to remote parks for star gazing this summer! These are very sweet lyrics and thanks for the prompt!

Jyllian's picture

I think the chorus is very strong. Great images too. The idea of plunging into darkness and being lifted by a star(which would at some time be a falling star?). Nice take.