The Funeral/ could I miss anyone more than I miss my mother now?
Marthie: I tweaked the shape of it a bit, the end is my favorite and me personally would make that the chorus because it drives home the message of the song.
Whopping 6 minute song...
Stephen: On mobile until tomorrow, but will say for now that this was based on a Reddit post. My mother is still doing well.
The Funeral- Stephen Wordsmith
My mother died at home, because she loved its cracks and corners/ And I felt that it was not my given place/ To let her slip away in some old hospice full of sterile things/ And holes in every ceiling tile's face
My husband and I stayed there, locked behind the door that locked out/ All the kith and all the kin who loved her most/ I tried to steer the world, and tried to steal a moment's slumber/ In the battered rocking chair beside her ghost/ BUT I COULDN'T, SO I DIDN'T…
1. The carers came, to give me strength/ To feed my soul at four arms' length
I wanted so to hold them close/ But couldn't, so I didn't
2.Then the undertakers stopped on by/ To hang her final curtain high
I wanted so to shake their hands/BUT COULDN'T, SO I DIDN'T
3.Pre-chorus: Instead, it was my phone that said/ Each choice, and spoke each tear I shed
I longed to make them face-to-face/(BUT COULDN'T, SO I DIDN'T)
4.They said 'Of course, they can attend/ As long as they're her closest friend'
I tried to cut the list to ten/ BUT COULDN'T, SO I DIDN'T
5.And each of them asked 'Can we come/To see her at the funeral home?'
I yearned to tell them 'welcome, yes'/BUT COULDN'T, SO I DIDN'T.
6. Pre-chorus: The shops were under lock and key/A black dress not essential, see
Could I buy one to watch her go?/(I COULDN'T, SO I DIDN'T)
7. And paperwork for 'loved and lost'/Comes not without its paper cost
I tried to cover every cent/BUT COULDN'T, SO I DIDN'T
8.I'll sell the car to pay the debt/And see that every end was met
The law stepped in and stripped my pen/I COULDN'T, SO I DIDN'T
9.Bridge: And through it all, my mind would sing/Could I miss any one or thing
More than I miss my mother now?/I COULDN'T…
10.But could I drop my guard and let/ My actions spread the beast's sick net
And put another in my place?/I COULDN'T…AND I WON'T
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