Hear Me (Ordinary Time)

Hear Me (Ordinary Time)

fresh spotless youth's picture

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I'm not gonna lie, I think this is a great song. This recording, however, is falling apart at the seams. I picture some great drumming, maybe Buddy Rich meets Iggy Pop--something to hold this together and make it swing, going double time in places and half time in other places. There are times when I'm fighting with the rhythm tracks I have, so I'm having a hard time finding the swing. I could take it back to zero and re-record, but I hope the Song shines through the recording. If I were in a studio with actual musicians I would like to extend the outro, weaving together the "It's always sometime" part with the "Nothing ventured" part.

My oblique strategies question: Is it finished? No

Lyrics: 

Oh it’s always sometime somewhere
And you...you gotta do something with it

Nothing ventured
Nothing gained
Well that’s what the people say
But other people say hurray
Whenever they see you stumble
See the birds up on the wire
See the worms down in the mire
See the wages of desire
See the people singing
I/me/I/me

It’s an ordinary day
When all the people will say that
It’s high time you knew your place
But other people will say that
There’s no broken
Not even bent
All this shit’s not heaven-sent
Just bits and pieces of our
Ordinary time

Hear me, hear me

Lest your sackclock stink for days
Forget the people will say that
Your sackcloth stank for days
You know what people will say
You know what people will say….but

Nothing ventured
Nothing gained
No cakes left in the rain
No fingerpaint parades
Go on and let ‘em see you stumble
See the birds up on the wire
See the worms down in the mire
Forget the wages of desire
All the people singing
I/me/I/me

It’s an ordinary day
When all the people will say that
It’s high time you knew your place
But other people will say that
We’re not broken
Not even bent
All this shit’s not heaven-sent
Just bits and pieces of our
Ordinary time

Hear me, hear me

It’s always sometime somewhere
And you...you gotta do something with it
(Nothing ventured, nothing gained)

Ordinary time
Hear me, hear me



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wobbie wobbit's picture

really nice putting across of the concept and catchy too, love your delivery. really well rounded song very enjoyable

Jerry Pettit's picture

Really interesting "treatment" on your vocal. Love it!

This is a great song. I'm sure it WOULD be fun to revisit someday and "fix"--although I'm not really catching any major problems. That's kind of my philosophy with the songs I post--they're not going to be perfect, just get them out there because some songs are going to be written then that wouldn't otherwise be...and some of them will be great. Like this one!!

Technicolor Gramophone's picture

These lyrics are great ... I love the rebutting of the "everything happens for a reason" idea. Sackcloths aren't much mentioned in today's pop hits, and "other people say hurray when you stumble" is fab. Music is catchy and reminiscent of late 80s/early90s rock - listened twice!

billwhite51's picture

a super catchy song with great lyrics and i love your phrasing. maybe it doesnt swing but maybe it shouldnt swing. it moves, and i think t moves in just the right way.

Ferry Colyer's picture

Gotta like me a sloppy tune like this. It works really well with your phrasing; great cadence. Must feel good to tell some truth in a cool tune like this!

Jeuse's picture

I sense a hybrid of realism and optimism and it's infectious. I think this would be a windows down sing it and work it out anthem with the drums you described. Make it happen, this songs got legs, mate!

If you're like me, it's the times when things go off the rails when you really learn about how to make your process more resilient. And you also discover whether or not the material is worth the effort. The good news here is that it absolutely is. The song shines through the recording.

From the sound of things you were singing along to a playback of the rhythm track? Your stuff doesn't usually sound like this, I know - I'd love to hear a version put together with your usual methodology, because it absolutely deserves to get its chance to fly.

katpiercemusic's picture

It is a really good song and it definitely does shine through, but I also hear why you were frustrated. It sounds like a pop punk type of thing, but it sounds like you’re holding back when you sing it to keep with the music. But the music works really well, so maybe this is too simple a solution, but have you tried cranking the volume and maybe upping the tempo a bit? I really do think all the parts work really well.

IA's picture

This has a 90s pop rock feel to it to me. Definitely would expect to hear something like this if I traveled back in time to 1997.

I love that it's a bit higher tempo. Got some real attitude. What it needs is a music video of people in tacky clothing walking around outside! Embrace the 90s!