I am Gone

I am Gone

Chandra83's picture



I imagine
Lines of red
Criss-crossing my body
As I lie dead

The life I lived
Has bled away
I no longer
Need to stay

I am gone
And I am cold
Never to fear
About growing old.

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Stephen Wordsmith's picture

Very visceral - the boldness of the red, the infinite cutting edges of the vivisection, the harshness of the cold... The last lines add a human touch and a bit of philosophy; a surprise, but not an unwelcome one.

AndyGetch's picture

I like how the lyric is vague about the cause of death. The line rhythms and rhymes are solid.