Turn A New Leaf

Turn A New Leaf

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Skirmish Prompt: Leaf

A quick write during a short break from another project for work. Open to suggestions for making it better!

Lyrics: 

Turn A New Leaf

V1
I need to bite the bullet
‘cause you keep jumping the gun
I will not wear your target
you must walk before you run
I doubt you will ever be done
running to chase the sun
always looking for fun
looking for fun forever
when forever is hard won

C
I need to bite the bullet
I need to turn a new leaf
I need to say goodbye
before you cause me more grief
I’ve got to do it now
I will do it somehow
I have got to turn....
turn a new leaf

V2
I need to turn a new leaf
but you need to turn a new tree
I may go back to square one
but you are so far behind me
oh why couldn’t you ever see
the changes we did need
if you wanted to be
wanted to be together
if together was with me

C
I need to bite the bullet
I need to turn a new leaf
I need to say goodbye
before you cause me more grief
I’ve got to do it now
I will do it somehow
I have got to turn....
turn a new leaf

B
seasons will come and seasons will go
leaves will change colors and fall
but love can be lasting over time
like trees when the roots are strong

C
I need to bite the bullet
I need to turn a new leaf
I need to say goodbye
before you cause me more grief
I’ve got to do it now
I will do it somehow
I have got to turn....
turn a new leaf



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Comments

cindyrella's picture

Wonderful take and very creative way to do it. I love that bridge!

metalfoot's picture

I thought of the 'turn a new leaf' motif myself before doing what I did. Nice work with the theme and the bridge, as Cindy noted, is especially strong.

coolparadiso's picture

Nice use of the prompt. Seasons changing is so defining. Nice skirmish.

mike skliar's picture

very interesting use of putting together a whole bunch of known phrases and making it into something new- this is very good!

MarkG's picture

Love the line about "you need to turn a new tree!" Also like the opening where bullets, guns and targets all jumble together.

jcollins's picture

Looking at the lyrics...nice opening set of visuals. Forever is a highlight in this section. The bite the bullet line hits pretty hard but I saw this coming. I like the fact that before you cause me, even more, grief is in the song. That's what turns a new leaf idea is in your song. Yeah, you need to turn a new tree...lol. V2 is loaded with goodies too and has a bit of 70s soul I think. The bridge offers a chance to make this right, which is really nice. Nice job on this Liz.

barbara's picture

I love the thing you do at the end of the chorus and verses, with partial repeats of previous lines. It give a slight quirkiness to the lines, and a lightness. And speaking of light, the first couplet of V2 gave me a real laugh! As for suggestions for improvements, I felt that V1 didn’t give me much understanding of the situation so I felt a little lost trying to understand the what and why for the metaphors, so maybe if you could insert some hints? Of course it might be that I brought my own confusion because the phrase “turning over a new leaf” is so close, and I understand that one to mean improving our own behavior, as opposed to turning a new leaf, as in just starting a new chapter. Also loved the end of V2. This is a great style!

JWHanberry's picture

Lots of good wordplay here using familiar phrases. I must agree with barbara in that I'm not quite sure what is going on. I'm sure you can fix it. Wink

corinne54's picture

The bridge pulls it all together - as it should! Fine writing as per usual

Rockwrites75's picture

Hey Kahlo2013, you did an excellent job on your new song I like it. Your lyrics sound great.