Whispering in the Wind

Whispering in the Wind

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Liner Notes: 

Early morning lyrics only. Wrote this backwards from the chorus,

Lyrics: 

V1 It all had seemed so bright
Everything seemed alright
It looked like forever
The ties would never sever

V2 But slowly cracks appeared
Wider than we feared
What use to cause a giggle
Now became a niggle

C There’s a whispering in the wind
With a message i can’t rescind
At this 11th hour
I said it’s all over now

V3 We still tried to give it a go
But the distance started to grow
What once had been such fun
Dropped daily like the sun

V4 We even set a date
But in my heart it felt to late
And as the time got near
All that grew was fear

C There’s a whispering in the wind
With a message i can’t rescind
At this 11th hour
I said it’s all over now

B why couldn’t we just be straight
We both could see our fate
Yet we stayed sitting on the fence
It just made no kind of sense.

V5 So now the time was hear
It all became so clear
As i embraced the disarray
I now knew what to say

So
C its more than whispering in the wind
Its message i can’t rescind
At this 11th hour
I say it’s all over now



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Comments

cindyrella's picture

This is so good! I love that 11th hour and the whole mood, while sad, is so real to life. Great skirmish!

corinne54's picture

You have some nice ideas and lines. You could polish this one up.

Amanda West's picture

Neat take on the theme !
I especially like these 2 lines,
"There’s a whispering in the wind
With a message i can’t rescind" They kinda stick in my mind Smile

kahlo2013's picture

I love the rhyme wind and rescind - especially how you use those lines in this chorus. You weave a strong story of love gone wrong. I like the clarity in the bridge.

musicsongwriter's picture

Beautiful lyrics and take on a prompt. Very inspiring. Looking forward to hearing it.
Nadia
I didn't participate this time around:)

jcollins's picture

Looking at the lyrics...nice build-up in v1 and v2. Yeah, the chorus is similar to my lyrics...it's over. v3 and v4 unfolding what happened. Bridge part shows the pointless separation. Nice finish in v5 chorus and out. Good job John.

JWHanberry's picture

Well told story. You found some good lines to use doing it. I'm a fan of giggle and niggle!

phoenixash's picture

The rhymes are solid, the lyrics are sad but that's how I roll. You have a very good hand for feelings and stories. Incredible.

benjo's picture

oh yes what a stunner

I just loved the story telling here
everything is perfect, wonderful
this one sticks with you

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