Unseen

Unseen

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Sunday Skirmish August 25, 2019 "Unseen"

Lyrics: 

Unseen

Everybody I know
Unseen
Where did you go?
Unseen
What happen to the show?
Unseen
Why wasn't I told?
Unseen

I was hoping that we could talk
I didn't expect you to go into shock
I simply needed to let you know
I'm not going to be around for the big show
I've been thinking about this thing
I noticed you disappeared and been unseen
I can't live like this
I think this needs to be our last kiss

Chorus

I know you like hanging with your friends
But it seems to me you got loose ends
I keep looking but cannot find
I ask you for a little help and you have no time
You talk about having your ring
You can't stand to hear me sing
I tried to find you but you pulled some strings
You have disappeared again and are unseen

Chorus
Inst

Bridge
I hate to see this going down
We don't smile we simply frown
Our whole relationship is a messed up thing
I tried to find you and you’re unseen
Let's not talk about wedding rings



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Comments

coolparadiso's picture

On the deeper side. Its a really good song and in skirmish time well done.

musicsongwriter's picture

Wow, this is so cool! Your song can be understood in so many levels including some lines being related to losing people on 50/90 as many disappeared. I like the like-hearted feel in your song. Very catchy song. Impossible not to want to tap along/sing along/dance along. Cool solo! Amazing it's a skirmish song.
Nadia ~

cindyrella's picture

Cool music and refreshingly different. Good skirmish!

AndyGetch's picture

A big story and the angsty vibe fits the lyrics. Well done on the skirmish!

Rockwrites75's picture

Hey Jerry, my friend you did an excellent job on your new song I like it bro. It has excellent lyrics, awesome opening and guitar solo.

JWHanberry's picture

Cool double take on "unseen". It keeps us wondering who's unseen next. Lots of music for a skirmish. Good job.

Chip Withrow's picture

Groovy, groovy song! I love jangly folk rock like this - Tom Petty, Jayhawks, etc.
Excellent, pointed lyrics. I dig the echo on the vocal, the unique bridge, and those super cool guitar sounds (electric and acoustic). You nailed this one!

phoenixash's picture

Good to see that you reached fifty and didn't stop. Love the playing and the solo. The story is intriguing as I can't really tell who are you talking about.

kahlo2013's picture

Really well conceived and crafted as it conveys the natural end of a relationship where one person drifts away and the other person is left having to make a decision. The story evolves with a honest dose of reality. I love the repetitive use of unseen in the chorus. That is really effective. Great music, melody and fine vocals deliver the message well.

wobbie wobbit's picture

wow you got so much done for a skirmish. strong song great arrangement and performance. nice storytelling too. great skirmishing.

pokerowan's picture

"I think this needs to be our last kiss" and "Let's not talk about wedding rings" are BRUTAL lines. So very very good. I love the solo at the start, too, and I can so picture playing this in a convertible that's roaring down a roman road on a sunny afternoon! This song is heated and very enjoyable!

Kristi's picture

This seems to dig deeper into a relationship more than just being "unseen" and it's sad as there's a lot of unanswered questions this person has. I enjoyed the melody and playing and the solo too. Adds some reflection. I see it's a skirmish...cool title and interpretation and the production is well done.