Because I'm Numb

Because I'm Numb

Amanda West's picture
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Written as a skirmish (the lyrics) for the Theme of 'The long road'.

As often is the case when I do a skirmish, I start out intending one thing and then it totally morphs with just a remnant of the original theme left intact. But hey ho, that's how my muse works so be it Smile

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Lyrics: 

v1
You know you're in trouble when you hide yourself away
So that nobody and nothing can see who's really there
There are starbursts all around you and you wonder all alone
At the simple basic beauty of it all

Chorus
I've crawled towards the sun
And I've sailed in winter storms
Waited for the mail that never comes
I've struggled to be free
And I've found that friends are few
Chose my road with love an' care because I'm numb
Chose my road with love an' care because I'm numb

v2
The purple of the foxglove is attractive to the eye
But one bite of any part and your heart will stop it's beat
Deadly things will hide right under evil that is plied
Pretty things are often those who lie

Chorus
I've crawled towards the sun
And I've sailed in winter storms
Waited for the mail that never comes
I've struggled to be free
And I've found that friends are few
Chose my road with love an' care because I'm numb
Chose my road with love an' care because I'm numb



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Comments

musicsongwriter's picture

Very vivid, strong images of the life journey, storms, being tired after a long fight with life obstacles. Dramatic and poignant.
Nadia

pokerowan's picture

"The purple of the foxglove is attractive to the eye" - how I love to see iambic meter in song lyrics!! And that "love an' care" line is so domestic and pretty. The voice of the speaker really carries over in your words here.

MarkG's picture

Sometimes it is a lonely road, indeed. Wondering at the basic beauty all alone.

cindyrella's picture

Such clear images as to boggle my mind! Beautifully written. Please let me know when I can hear it!

coolparadiso's picture

Very strong images! Covers a huge amount of ground and uses lots of different comparisons. A lot in the time, well skirmished.

JWHanberry's picture

I like the crawling toward the sun line. Quite an image. Wonderful how you brought the foxglove into the story. It grew wild in my yard in Seattle. Pretty stuff but don't touch!

Amanda West's picture

@JWHanberry I have a tonne of them right outside my studio window here. They self seed and are semi wild (so is my garden lol). I love them Smile But I also respect them !

metalfoot's picture

Foxglove -- pretty but dangerous. Life can be like that! Solid write (but all of yours are, aren't they?).
Friends are few so hang on to the real ones!

Chip Withrow's picture

I like that you write a singable meter, but the lines are non-rhyming. That propels the song along, I think.
I hear a jangly acoustic tune in my head for this one.
Thanks for the prompt!

kahlo2013's picture

Love that second verse and appreciate the strong chorus. Wonderfully poetic images that express the strong sentiment of a rough and sometimes lonely long journey so well.