You've Got More of an Achilles' Body

You've Got More of an Achilles' Body

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Liner Notes: 

I was trying to channel 'Folie a Deux'-era FOB, so let me know if that worked, haha.

Lyrics: 

I’m like a stepping stone
A solid enough start
Trodden underfoot
When someone follows their heart

I don’t wanna be your stepping stone
Destined not to carry on
Submerged and stuck
Long after they’ve gone

If I dig myself out of this mud
The water’s never gonna run clear

So weep like a wound
Weep like a wound
Something better’s gotta be somewhere out there for me
(Weep like a wound)
Weep like a wound
One day I’ll heal up a little more cleanly
Weep like a wound
Weep like a wound
you don’t know how it feels
Time’s ticking,
the gauze is sticking
And I’m gonna come for your heels

I’m just a practice test
Not for real, not for keeps, not for trying your best
When it comes to the mock
You got zero interest

I don’t wanna be your quick run
I just wanna be the One
Picking myself up
Long after you’ve gone

And if I dig myself out of this mud
The water’s never gonna run clear

So weep like a wound
Weep like a wound
Something better’s gotta be somewhere out there for me
(Weep like a wound)
Weep like a wound
One day I’ll heal up a little more cleanly
Weep like a wound
Weep like a wound
you don’t know how it feels
Time’s ticking,
the gauze is sticking
And I’m gonna come for your heels

Bleeding out in bold
This demo disc is getting old
Stone weathers and it loses it edge
But you’re never gonna step on me again
Never gonna step on me again

Someone better’s gotta be somewhere out there for me
(Weep like a wound)
Weep like a wound
One day I’ll heal up a little more cleanly
Weep like a wound
Weep like a wound
you don’t know how it feels
Time’s ticking,
the gauze is sticking
And I’m gonna come for your heels



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Comments

metalfoot's picture

This is a really pretty tune you've concocted here and the image of weeping like a wound in the light of the Achilles metaphor... wow.
Solid writing. I'm consistently impressed by your stuff!

(I have no idea who FOB is or "Folie a Deux" but this is great.)

billwhite51's picture

two guitars sound so good together, as do the two harmonizing and overlapping vocals. om haring this as a response to sleepers inbetweener from the point of view of the inbetweener.

splittybooms's picture

The harmonies really hit the ear in a sweet spot.
This is another track that I would probably add to my library if I heard it randomly on Spotify.
Its got a lot of those intangible things that appeal to me with this specific style (guitar + voice).
Clever writing here.
Some aspects of this track make me think of the artist A Fine Frenzy, who I enjoy very much.
Another great track from you.

fresh spotless youth's picture

This is totally my cup of tea. Those harmonies take something that was already special and turn it up a notch. That opening couplet is great--a solid enough start! I really like the way you mix up the rhythms in the vocal, and there are some tasty guitar lines as well. (Really awesome title, too)