The Stars In Your Eyes

The Stars In Your Eyes

splittybooms's picture
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Host: @corinne54
THEME/PROMPT: "REACH FOR THE STARS" Modify as you wish

21 minutes over this time.
Really not how I wanted this to go...very incomplete; the whole meaning of the song was kind of omitted cause I didn't have time to go back and fix it.
The idea was that we always want to reach the stars (my take was reaching the actual stars, instead of a motivational take of reaching FOR the stars, with stars being goals) but what if the stars wanted to reach us - but the stars that I am talking about are the stars inside of that beautiful girl's eyes. I want whats in her eyes, but what if (miraculously, with how MY luck goes lol) SHE also yearns for the stars in MY eyes??
So yeah, that whole point was kinda lost here as I didn't get to record the vocals for the rest of what I wanted to say.
Oh well...
Just ended up with a very simple and short demo.
I felt very silly speaking the words in the beginning, and actually deleted a LOT more spoken word stuff (kinda what took away a lot of my time)...
I know i know, do it do it do it anyway and such...but its gonna take time for me to get more comfortable doing stuff. I feel I've come a long way with being able to not cringe at what I have done so far with my voice, so...



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Comments

Kristi's picture

Well, I think you're too hard on yourself. This is some impressive music. It's bold and has a force behind it that adds to the power of your message. I liked the spoken word parts. Even if you do more with it, you've got a cool thing going already!

JWHanberry's picture

Love this good strong beat. The spoken word is a good setup for it. The samples that come in later give your production a very dense atmosphere. I think it's a good one.

musicsongwriter's picture

Very cool take on skirmish. I like your original take on the prompt.
Nadia

MarkG's picture

I'm intrigued by your concept of the stars in space being the stars in you and your lover's eyes. And the mutual gravitational force of both--am I getting it right? It's something worth spending more time on, in my opinion, because I think you have a strong base for a sensational song.

cts's picture

Actually I thought it was rather cool to hear your vocals come through. Glad you did it. Very fine groove here with a Depeche Mode/ Nine Inch Nails kinda vibe working. i told Donnie to listen to your stuff because he could benefit from your production skills. We'll see where all that goes. Keep reaching for the stars, bro!

3tdoan's picture

Oy, no overthinking it in a skirmish Wink This is a bumpin' track! You really create a spacey ambiance with the instrumentation you've chosen.

Chip Withrow's picture

Wish I had some headphones! I dig the slow-burn groove that drives the melodic spaciness. And I think the spoken-word sets a nice theme that the music sure seems to follow.

Amanda West's picture

Love that ethereal yet driving instrumental, and those almost there voices are just perfect to go with the whole feeling.
You are way too hard on yourself re your voice. You have a cool sounding voice. I think we all hate the sound of our own voices, I know I do, hence I never record anything !