The Silent Treatment

The Silent Treatment

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Liner Notes: 

Day 5 for the July 2019 Fearless Songwriting Challenge - "Weapon of Choice". I was doing some freewriting on this topic and thought about how silence can be used as a weapon in a relationship. This was an exercise in exploring a nonautobiographical story while using the "I" pronoun. If I revisit this song, it would be interesting to maybe explore using other pronouns. This is more contemporary pop than other songs I have written and I don't particularly listen to current music. I think I've absorbed some things through osmosis - many of my friends are into more modern music (I have the musical tastes of my parents - mostly 60s, 70s, and 80s music).

I liked having this extended metaphor of the "silent treatment" as if it was prescribed by a doctor. In relationships in the past, I have leaned on my partner to try to fix me. That's not healthy and doesn't sustain. This was a hard-learned lesson.

The arrangement was something I wrestled with. I ended up putting the chorus first to see how that would feel. Things feel a bit rushed - probably because of the rhythmic nature of the lyrics. I would explore maybe adding some non-lyric sections to allow the song (and myself) to breathe.

Lyrics: 

Don’t you give me the silent treatment
You think you’ll fix my wounded heart
I try to quit your fix
But it’s too strong
You pull me down

You’re no doctor
So why do I expect you to know
How to heal my heart
You don’t need an M.D.
To have a little empathy
And not want to give up

When the tears start falling
You shuffle in your seat
And turn away until you think I’m better
Where’s your bedside manner?
You can’t even hold me

A prescription of pain
To fill right away
Why do I keep coming back
To your medicine
Cause when you’re on me
And whisper in my ear
I could ride
Your high forever

Don’t you give me the silent treatment
You think you’ll fix my wounded heart
I try to quit your fix
But it’s too strong
You pull me down

Don’t you give me the silent treatment
You think you’ll fix my wounded heart
I try to quit your fix
But it’s too strong
You pull me down



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Comments

tamsnumber4's picture

Love the melody on the chorus and I like starting this off with the chorus, that works. I think all new songs always feel rushed because you haven't locked down the phrasing. I really like song, feels contemporary, the subject is relatable, I enjoyed listening to you, but your site you host music on with the ads and your next song starts to play in middle of this one was difficult LOL!! You have a nice voice and I really like the write
"A prescription of pain
To fill right away
Why do I keep coming back
To your medicine

Awesome line!!

sbs2018's picture

You mentioned the idea of changing the pronoun, so reading the lyrics first, I was thinking it had a message type of vibe and might work better if you substituted “I” for “you.” Then I listened to the demo and the delivery was so good (I could listen to you sing all day), I think it works, especially the chorus.

billwhite51's picture

i can imagine a boy band running around the stage, sharing off the vocals , while the girls in the audience scream their heads off. , i hear this multiplicity of voices, sometimes in harmony, sometimes emerging from the harmony. a choir raising their voices against silence

coolparadiso's picture

Yup its got that je ne sais quoi! That makes hit songs! I love prescription of pain. I love the jumpy cadence of the song.

splittybooms's picture

Can get into this.
The melody appeals to the ears, hitting the sweet spots that pop music tends to do.
Lyrics have substance, especially with your liner notes. But even without knowing any of the background, it still carries weight with most people and they can find meaning in them and relate to it.
Also it simply SOUNDS good - your vocals, and just the guitar! I'm waaay out of the loop with today's music myself, so I dunno if anybody is making it onto the radio with just voice+guitar stuff these days, but this sounds like a song I'd NOT change the station on. Seriously - you got yourself an awesome bit of tune here.