Superficial

Superficial

DeannaSweidel's picture

Liner Notes: 

One of my goals this 50/90 was to finish a few songs that have lingered for months/years. This one has been rolling around since April 2019. Never could seem to get it to work. I finally figured out one of the glaring issues and was able to at least get it to this point today. I'm calling it "done" but I feel a few tweaks will likely be in this lyric's future.

Lyrics: 

Superficial
(c) 2019
Deanna Sweidel

Did you see the latest news about
That political official?
How’s it going? How’s the family?
Conversation’s artificial

We gotta keep the talk benign
Cuz when we cross the line

It’s all miss you wanna see you
I wanna hold you all night long
Wanna kiss you wanna love you
For it’s been just far too long
You and I have too much heat
Can’t resist you, there’s no middle
And now every time we talk
We’ve gotta keep it superficial

Did you hear the latest scandal
You think the story’s credible
How’s the weather? How’s the new job?
Our chat so one dimensional

We gotta keep the talk benign
Cuz when we cross the line

It’s all miss you wanna see you
I wanna hold you all night long
Wanna kiss you wanna love you
For it’s been just far too long
You and I have too much heat
Can’t resist you, there’s no middle
And now every time we talk
We’ve gotta keep it superficial

Got dirt on the old gang from school?
I’ve got gossip so benign
Want to tell you that I want you
But I don’t want to cross that line

Because
I miss you wanna see you
I wanna hold you all night long
Wanna kiss you wanna love you
For it’s been just far too long
You and I have too much heat
Can’t resist you, there’s no middle
And now every time we talk
It’s cold and sterile, so official
Our passion runs too deep
So let’s just keep it superficial



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Comments

billwhite51's picture

good idea here and the writing is excellent. in my unsolicited opinion, i would open with the chorus that begins It’s all miss you wanna see you. why? because it immediately draws the listener in and makes us want to know what is going on....when you open with political officials, you are telling us we are about to get a socio political message, and so we already get the picture......by opening with the personal,,, the political angle opens the story wider, gives us a larger picture than we expected. also the quick rhythm of the chorus gets the listener excited and into the music right away. just my perspective. what i really like about the lyric is how it shows how identity politics invades and interferes with personal relationships,

Klaus's picture

I get a lot of passion from the chorus. It's like that with some people, it's a very on-off relationship and you describe it well. I like the contrast between verses and chorus. There is the same tension that is between these two people and it's funny how the most normal lines can have so emotional effect when you know the context. Well written lyrics, I'd say.

3tdoan's picture

Great concept with the contrasting sections between the acceptable public conversations and private thoughts and desires. I see this as a story of ex-lovers or perhaps an affair that's being juuust kept at bay.

coolparadiso's picture

Yup conceptually very strong and to my eye a little less structured than many of yours and even some edgier rhymes which i really like credible, dimensionable and even a scandal thrown in. Nice one.

kahlo2013's picture

I love the conversation feeling of this - the longing and the passion amid the catching up in conversation feel. Great concept and carry through and a slice of reality.

AndyGetch's picture

Ooh this one sounds like some of my early dates. Hopefully this gets music cause I sure am hearing it!