Letter to Myself

Letter to Myself

Amanda West's picture
Feast

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Liner Notes: 

Wanted to write something fast before bed, so picked one of last week's superskirmish prompts as inspiration.
I picked @wobbie wobbit 's theme "A letter"...
I did manage to do this inside the 1 hour skirmish time, but I wasn't really working to that, I just wanted to get to bed !

This is part imagination and part autobio stuff, all mixed in as we writers do.

I was kinda thinking along rap lines style for the bridge, but never having attempted that kinda thing before I have likely failed miserably lol

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Technical bit Sad

Collaborations:
The next bit sounds harsher than it is - it's mainly just to ensure that we discuss the collaboration before we start, and that we are on the same playing field Smile

Please ask me first if you would like to use my lyrics, just in case someone else has already asked and has started working with them.

If you wish to collaborate with a view to the finished song being used outside/after 50/90, please check with me before we start, as I often use my lyrics professionally with non 50/90 co-writers, after 50/90 Smile

If you wish to change my lyrics, please check with me first to ensure I'm happy with the changes. I am usually open to discussion, as that is how collaboration works !

The above isn't meant to sound difficult, it's just a matter of sorting what we are doing before we start, so everyone is happy - communication ! Smile

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Many thanks, love and peace,
Amanda Smile

Lyrics: 

v
Now and then, here and there
I'd kick myself every single day
If it didn't hurt so damn much
and mess my hair

pre ch
I tell myself to stop and think, to breathe the air
I owe myself, to feel so free, to not compare,

ch
I really need some fixin' to quell the disarray
I really need to listen to what I have to say

v
I'm really not into vanity
But that's more because I feel a fraud
Behind the scenes, disappear
and hide my fear

pre ch
I tell myself to stop and think, to breathe the air
I owe myself, to feel so free, to not compare,

ch
I really need some fixin' to quell the disarray
I really need to listen to what I have to say

br
There's a place that we all come to that creates a kinda void
With a laced up choke-hold that we try an' avoid
I'm empty and devoid, some might say paranoid
I'd like to say untroubled but I haven't studied Freud

ch
I really need some fixin' to quell the disarray
I really need to listen to what I have to say

and an outro ?



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Comments

kahlo2013's picture

I love the insight and the clear message to yourself. It is much easier to know what we should do than to actually do it. Not sure if you need an outro, but you could have something as simple as saying again I really need to listen.. and maybe echo listen

Valerie Cox's picture

Right. Not listening to our own advice is where we totally screw up everytime. This is a great theme for a song. That first verse is really funny. Wouldn't want to mess the hair up. Smile

cts's picture

The first verse is boss. This has a seriousness/playfulness that Sting used to display when he was with The Police. I can definitely relate to the theme and while I don't have to worry about messing up my hair, I do kick my butt quite often! Biggrin

Amanda West's picture

@Valerie Cox and @cts what's an inside joke for myself, is that I brush my hair when I get up in the morning, and that's IT ! Even when I wash it, all I do is brush the knots out, make a parting on one side, and thats IT Smile I'm lucky in that my hair is a little wavy, so mess tends to not show Wink

billwhite51's picture

like the advice ophelia gave to her brother when he warned her about responding to hamlets advances,r,,,,,,,Do not, as some ungracious pastors do, show me the steep and thorny way to heaven Whiles, like a puffed and reckless libertine, himself the primrose path of dalliance treads and recks not his own rede......i quote this to assure you that, thematically, you are in good company.

darcistrutt's picture

Sometimes I hope I’m not listening to myself. My internal dialog can be a bit harsh. Nice writing! I especially identified with the bridge. The Freud/paranoid rhyme made me smile. Poetic!