Moon Over Us

Moon Over Us

DeannaSweidel's picture
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Liner Notes: 

I worked on Sunday, but loved this prompt idea and an idea came to me, so I ran with it.

Lyrics: 

Moon Over Us
(c) 2019
Deanna Sweidel

Living separate lives
We just couldn’t last
Distance separates
Can’t erase the past

Sunrise every day
A bright reminder
You made your choices
About you and her

But late at night
We’re staring at
The same moon over us
Shining pale light
Through the dark sky
On all the hurt that was
I cry at night
While staring at
That same moon over us

You and I as one
Wasn’t in the stars
Really thought we tried
Love was finally ours

Sunset every day
A fading gesture
Easily setting
Off into the west

But late at night
We’re staring at
The same moon over us
Shining pale light
Through the dark sky
On all the hurt that was
I cry at night
While staring at
That same moon over us

Do you see at night
The same moon over us
Do you think of me
And all the pain you caused

Oh late at night
We’re staring at
The same moon over us
Shining pale light
Through the dark sky
On all the hurt that was
I cry at night
While staring at
That same moon over us

Shining pale light
Through the dark sky
I’m staring at
That same moon over us



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Comments

cindyrella's picture

I love your take on this prompt! The idea that the same moon is over us-brilliant!

mike skliar's picture

yes, nice idea and well done! 'same moon over us' sounds like a great title, too...

JWHanberry's picture

Sensitive depiction of the emotions a "same moon" can inspire. Sad or bridging distance. Well done.

Klaus's picture

Good use of several themes: how time goes slowly, a day or days that pass without the loved one, and the sun and moon ( and stars ) to say things with emotional resonance. The moon, it's pale and cool light is like the tiny hope that woman is clinging to, her only comfort. And the lyrics still seem to suggest even more than that. There's something mystic about them.

When I read this the chorus sounds more touching with every repeat. Now this one is really well done!

Jibbidy34's picture

Your rhymes are excellent in this and really understated which is nice. There is a nice mixing bowl of emotions going on here too. I can sense anger and sadness as well as nostalgia from different lines/sections.