Moon Over Lake Mendota ( Please go to Demo 40278)

Moon Over Lake Mendota ( Please go to Demo 40278)

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PLEASE SEE AWESOME DEMO by Cola and leave comments there:

http://fiftyninety.fawmers.org/song/40278

Skirmish prompt: Moon Over ________

I had started one - moon over the makeshift latrine - which I may finish later - but then went with something more comforting as I looked out at the lake...

Lyrics: 

moon over lake mendota

V1
when dark gray clouds roll quickly in
like a fast locomotive train
when those people you hold most dear
always seem busy or too far away

when the music you once loved
no longer frequently or clearly plays
when supportive words you need to hear
never seem to come your way

PC
watch for a clearing in the night sky
then look up to find the moon
so you will feel my love flow down
with comfort for you soon

C
the moon over lake mendota
with its soft buttercream moon beams
will reach down to carry my love...
my love to you

the moon over lake mendota
with its soft buttercream moon beams
will hold you close when you...
when you are blue

oh know this moon over lake mendota
is shining bright for you...

V2
when old memories surface
and make it hard to navigate through
when priorities seem to get lost
and challenges haunt all you do

when dreams appear so impossible
you can’t imagine them coming true
when love becomes a blurred shadow
of the treasured passion you once knew

PC
watch for a clearing in the night sky
then look up to find the moon
so you will feel my love flow down
with comfort for you soon

C
the moon over lake mendota
with its soft buttercream moon beams
will reach down to carry my love...
my love to you

the moon over lake mendota
with its soft buttercream moon beams
will hold you close when you...
when you are blue

oh know this moon over lake mendota
is shining bright for you...



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Comments

alyxanderjames's picture

This is lovely. You have some solid imagery going here - I especially like "buttercream moon beams"!

Adnama17's picture

It's like I'm sitting there seeing what you're seeing. Buttercream moon beams reminds me of our collab from, I think, last 50.90? "Raspberry sunset, lemonade moon rise", or something like that? Damn, I don't quite remember, but now I wanna go look that song up. I'll find it, eventually.
And very tender, loving, and evocative all over. The concern you have for your love shines bright; it's passion is undeniable. Love. Smile

tcelliott's picture

I like the buttercream moon beams. And I like how the verses are personal and direct and the chorus is big picture feelings. That's a pretty lake to write about as well.

JWHanberry's picture

Very good how the PC begins to lift us up (maybe that's why some folks call it the lift) and then the chorus delivers. I agree with TC, the buttercream moon beams are delicious.

cola's picture

This is so pretty! I love the internal rhyme in the phrase "soft buttercream moonbeams", and it gives me such a lovely mental image as well. In fact, the use of imagery is really excellent throughout the whole song. Awesome job!

splittybooms's picture

That 'buttercream moonbeams' seems to be a favorite for everyone, me included!
I bet it didn't even take you an hour to write this; I prob sound like a broken record by now but - such talent!
All of you have written such great songs whether lyric only or with music.
This makes me feel. I can feel looking up at the moon in the night sky while I'm feeling like garbage, and feeling the link to someone special through the big buttercream moonbeams.
Awesome stuff, as always

Zeekle's picture

I’m with everyone else, “butter cream moon beams” is such a fantastic line and makes delicious pictures in your head. Such a descriptive song, I’d love to see this moon over Lake Mendota

Amanda West's picture

Buttercream moonbeams is a way cool phrase !
I think that apart from that, I really like the line "when love becomes a blurred shadow". It paints such a clear picture, as we probably can all relate to it in some way or other.
Beautiful skirmish write Smile

wobbie wobbit's picture

lovely. love the soft buttercream moonbeams too. i like how the verses are all when this when that and the chorus then.... very nice skirmish write

Chip Withrow's picture

I know that feeling so well - the comfort of the moon. I've tried to capture it in song before, too.
And what a heartfelt piece you've created! It's been many years since I've had a lakeside summer experience, yet I'm transported back and loving the nostalgia.

DeannaSweidel's picture

Absolutely beautiful lyrics! And yes "buttercream moonbeams" is such an incredible line

Valerie Cox's picture

Awwww. That's beautiful. Really lovely images in here with the lake and the moon and the moonbeams. It's so sweet and comforting.