'Stormy Night'

'Stormy Night'

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Thank you John for a wonderful prompt! It's too noisy here as hubby is listening to music real loud. My lyrics are not based on my story, it's totally imaginary, based on the prompt theme. Open to tweaking and collaborations. Please let me know if you are interested and please share your thoughts. Thank you.

Lyrics: 

'Stormy Night'
Lyrics ©2019 Nadia Cripps

It's warm and relaxing tonight
The sky is rose and blue
I'm walking with you
But my thoughts are not right

It's not a calm night, no, not for me
You are making me angry, that's how it feels now
Whatever is said feels wrong somehow
You and me are swimming through a very choppy sea

It's a stormy night, a night to remember for the wrong reason
No more happy smiles, it's a rainy season

I wish we could remember our good days
When everything was connecting us
And there was never this unhappy phase
And we would respect one another whatever we discussed

You are stuck on your views,
Nothing seem to shift them ever
I tried so hard but it was no use
I better go my way before it's too late, it's now or never

It's a stormy night, a night to remember for the wrong reason
No more happy smiles, it's a rainy season
It's a stormy night, a stormy night,
It's a stormy night...



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Comments

Jibbidy34's picture

I like the imagery of the sky being rose and blue...and the metaphors woven throughout. Will you be putting this to piano?

metalfoot's picture

Lots of strong metaphors here for sure-- swimming through a choppy sea is my favourite of them. Nice skirmish work, Nadia!

johnstaples's picture

Really lovely lyrics Nadia! Such vivid description of the sky! I like how that first section could have been leading to a happy place but instead went somewhere else! Really great work on this prompt; I enjoyed my read!!!

JWHanberry's picture

Cool how you took a walk on a nice day and turned it into a storm inside. Good descriptive lyric all around.

Chip Withrow's picture

Good use of rhymes - interesting and unexpected. This has potential to be an amazing, dramatic piano ballad.

Amanda West's picture

I especially like these 2 lines, kinda like a refrain:
"It's a stormy night, a night to remember for the wrong reason
No more happy smiles, it's a rainy season"

tcelliott's picture

The rhyme scheme is very interesting here. I really like how you used the ABBA scheme in the first two stanzas. And after that couplet you switch it up which, to me, gives the following a bit more weight or at least a different feel. It's very effective.

Dawnsoap's picture

Such a wonderful portrayal of this topic. Just as the weather can suddenly change from beautiful to a storm, so can our own hearts. Love the images, beautifully done!