Don't Let it Start this Way

Don't Let it Start this Way

Stephen Wordsmith's picture

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Swordsmith sez; This year, the start of 50/90 has crept up on me somewhat, and my muse found herself caught with her pants down. With minutes to go, I had nothing to offer. However, after reflecting on this fact, I suddenly found that I had.

Lyrics: 

Don't let it start this way
Tell them I wrote something
Tell them I told them a wonderful tale
Don't pull the curtain back
Let them be certain I
Strove for success when I opted to fail

Don't let it start this way
Thrown in the spotlight
No mouth and no trousers, no something to say
Don't let me be the deer
Caught in the oncoming
Headlights of 'nothing to see here today'

Don't let them see me
A minuscule mortal
With migraines and cobwebs inside of my head
The pistol is smoking
The masses are roaring
The gates are flung wide but the greyhound is dead

The seconds are ticking
The runners are restless
The starter is waving the flag of bright green
No portrait of Dorian
For this old writer
Laid outlined in chalk as the crowd flee the scene

Don't let it start this way
Tell them I came in
With blazing of guns and a swashing of coat
Don't let me greet the dawn
Wrapped in my darkest hour
Don't let it start this way
Tell them I wrote



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Comments

Pearlmanhattan's picture

Deep and touching, for sure. If no one else grabs this up, I may be interested in collabing on it next month.

auldy's picture

"No mouth and no trousers, no something to say" real fears

wb for 2019

metalfoot's picture

THE GREYHOUND IS DEAD.

(I LOVE that line. Inspired me too, as you know!)

cindyrella's picture

Amazing when you think you got nothing and then bam!

kahlo2013's picture

You capture that sense of the imposter syndrome so well - the beauty is that you created something that is strong and relevant to i suspect many of us here. I love the vulnerability and honest feel.

cts's picture

Man, when the inspiration hits, it's like "Hiduken" with you!

metalfoot's picture

I need to learn how to fall down the production hole once in a while. Nice work here bringing this lyric to life, @ductapeguy!

Kristi's picture

Wonderful images in this. I think you've captured the fear and then some! "I strove for success but opted to fail"....very deep! Great stuff...

john crossman's picture

Timely and wistful, there are musicals currently being written that would kill a greyhound for an opening lyric like this.

wobbie wobbit's picture

love the mix of vulnerability and keeping face. can feel the fear of the muse and her urgency to perform and not be "found out" great start

Technicolor Gramophone's picture

Really witty, with excellent wordplay ... "mouth and trousers down" made me laugh! And "wrapped in my darkest hour" is wonderful.

Technicolor Gramophone's picture

Really witty, with excellent wordplay ... "mouth and trousers down" made me laugh! And "wrapped in my darkest hour" is wonderful.

Technicolor Gramophone's picture

Really witty, with excellent wordplay ... "mouth and trousers down" made me laugh! And "wrapped in my darkest hour" is wonderful.

Technicolor Gramophone's picture

Really witty, with excellent wordplay ... "mouth and trousers down" made me laugh! And "wrapped in my darkest hour" is wonderful.

Stephen Wordsmith's picture

Demo's up, so I get to comment!

Love what you've done with it, @ductapeguy. I get the impression of the opening of a musical, the impostor sitting on a single chair with the spotlight burning into him, as he accounts for why the curtain is up and his trousers are down. Figuratively speaking, of course.

johnstaples's picture

Wow, just when you thought you had nothing...you came up with something wonderful!

Don't let me be the deer
Caught in the oncoming
Headlights of 'nothing to see here today'

This may be the best few lines we will see this summer!! Love it!

darcistrutt's picture

Glad for this bit of “something” to kick of the summer. Each time FAWM or 50/90 comes around I wonder if my past songwriting was a fluke and nothing new will come. Then somehow it comes. I feel your words! Nice melody and feeling to match these fine words. Well done you two!

helen's picture

You know when TV shows that aren't normally musical, nor necessarily comedic sometimes do a weird thing where one of the characters just breaks into song for no apparent reason, that's what this feels like to me. I feel like it should be accompanied by a montage of someone walking along a corridor briefly interacting with lots of people on the way, but never stopping.

tcelliott's picture

I like the spotlight/performance and race settings in the lyric quite a bit. I was able to listen to this a couple of times and I think the music and melody have just the right feeling for the emotion in the lyric.

standup's picture

I like the miniscule mortal with migraines and cobwebs. And the no trousers / deer in headlights verse is nicely played too. Lots of great imagery in this song.

Acousticmaddie's picture

Strong musical take on these powerfull lyrics. The word choices are strong - Really well done.

Klaus's picture

Great lyrics. The fear of failure and wanting to look good is so familiar and told in an honest and fascinating way. The "tell them" bits are very effective and remind me of old folk songs when people died far away from home and wanted to give a good memory to their loved ones. Music is well done and makes the lyrics come alive and the uncertainty is touching in the vocals.

Great collab and very bonza first song of the Challenge 2019.

Chip Withrow's picture

Assuming the lyrics came first, I read them first. I imagined a soliloquy on stage, and the music sure delivered that power-ballad, singer/actor-baring-his-soul feel. Excellent collab!

kc5's picture

This is some great imagery here. Makes me want to read more of your stuff, but there's nothing more here! The melody and beat do well highlighting these wonderful lyrics!

phoenixash's picture

And then it started this way. I always find amazing how sometimes we feel like there's nothing that we have to say and then the muse comes and turns out we still have entire universes to create