Becky

Becky

oneslowtyper's picture

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Liner Notes: 

Just started typing, and this is what I came up with.
It's probably wishful thinking to think this may find music in the little time we have left.

Lyrics: 

Becky
V1
She never listens to the whispers…
She never screams… or runs away…
She has no brothers and no sisters…
No one to tell her… she'll be ok…

V2
Her mother died, when she was only seven…
Her father, he is still alive and well…
In three more years, he’ll be released from prison…
They sent him there, for putting her thru hell…

Ch
You want to shed a tear, for all the women…
Who lost their innocence, when they were young…
And just like Becky, they were mostly silent…
Their unsung words are words that must be sung…

V3
How many times, did Becky want to fight back?
How many times did Becky try to hide?
A little girl afraid to lose her father…
And scared as hell to have him by her side…

Ch
You want to shed a tear, for all the women…
Who lost their innocence, when they were young…
And just like Becky, they were mostly silent…
Their unsung words are words that must be sung…

Solo

Ch
You want to shed a tear, for all the women…
Who lost their innocence, when they were young…
And just like Becky, they were mostly silent…
Their unsung words are words that must be sung…



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Comments

kahlo2013's picture

Wow! This is so powerful, poignant and compelling! You portray the plight of many in an intimate way, putting a name and image of a person on a big and complex contemporary issue that has been a sad story of oppression and violence through the ages. Well done!

I think it's a great song, but would change "women" to "people", or "souls" since could be as well, -- be anyone of any age, child or "adult"; maybe "souls". For me, it then really reads, --compelling.

I get the "women" specific label, and go for it, -- however, since a draft, -- just say'in; the listener may well fill in the blank... child, girl, 120lb petite boy, woman or man.

I know more than a few, large males beaten (beaten) on a daily basis, etc., as inferred by the listeners mind, "head space"; even then took care of them (oppressive parent, or enabler), at life's end; an even weirder scenario for some.

Sadly, the word "father" is more challenging to change, -- and not change the song, way to much, --such as it is (and not my intent).

I think it can get musicated, almost immediately, if even to just sing the "spoken word" syntax and rhyme scheme, --then developed.

-- That's a great "quick write", flow of thought piece!

oneslowtyper's picture

I like your suggestion for using "people", as it keeps the same syllable count and can be inclusive to anyone, regardless of sex. I think I'll leave "father" as it contrasts the individual person in the verses and "people" will make the chorus universal to all. Thanks @ustaknow

billwhite51's picture

love this lyric. if you dont get music for it this time around, perhaps you will revive it in february.