Out of Her Depth

Out of Her Depth

barbara's picture

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Liner Notes: 

[Note: Could be triggering around sexual abuse]

The #MeToo tag is shorthand for saying what kind of content this is, in case anyone wants to steer away. This isn't an autobiographical storyline, but it ranges close to truth for me.

I wrote this from a LyriCloud, using all but the word 'jump'. Here's the list:

bad big cellphone cool couch debutantes eyes favorite friends house jump leather leg long revoke side sitting smoke soft spin Suzi sweet ten test wide year

Lyrics: 

On a worn leather couch
Down fraternity row
Sweet debutante sitting
Her fresh skin aglow

He hangs up his cell phone
And feels for a smoke
Tries not to remember
His tenure's revoked

She tries to seem cool
But her eyes are so wide
She crosses her leg
When he comes to her side

He says her name "Suzi"
As though it's a test
He's counting to 10, to see
What she does next

Just got her license
Not even a year
She's out of the house
But they don't know she's here
Her shining, dark hair
So soft, straight, and long
A favorite target
for things to go wrong

Her friends have gone home
He made sure they weren't welcome
The room starts to spin
And she can't think or reckon

His hands are so big
As they cover her mouth
Inside she is screaming
As bad things go south

Just got her license
Not even a year
She's out of the house
But they don't know she's here
Her shining, dark hair
So soft, straight, and long
A favorite target
for things to go wrong

She's out of the house
But they don't know she's here
She's out of the house
But they don't know she's here
She's out of the house
But they don't know she's here



Please keep your comments respectful, honest, and constructive. Please focus on the song and not the demo.

Comments

Valerie Cox's picture

Yeah, terrible that things like this happen so often. This flows well. Pretty much sings off the page. Really good use of the lyric cloud words. I try to do at least one or two of those each time. I've written one, but not done music yet.

kahlo2013's picture

Disturbing and tragic truths. Extra disturbing being it seems to be a university faculty member who is around young women all the time - we can assume this is not his first experience as a sexual predator. This is a challenging topic and your tell a story that evolves and flows well. The repetition of the lines at the end is haunting.

tamsnumber4's picture

Wow, I just read this straight through, I was in a bad situation once (not quite like this one) but I think you captured it really well and it reads like a novel with perfect cadence, a great write but disturbing on some levels because it is so true.

3tdoan's picture

This captures the predator circling his prey so well. "Bad things going south" is particularly sinister and suggestive.

tsunamidaily's picture

so powerful. the steady, almost hypnotic rhythm really evokes the dissociative state that such encounters can bring on, as does the insistent repetition of the chorus, and then refrain, at the end. simply stunning in its execution and concrete imagery. great job.