Wear his ring

Wear his ring

coolparadiso's picture

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Liner Notes: 

voice is still shot. but getting a backlog of songs just waiting to leap out. so being these are only demos they are coming as they are.

this song has a strange rhyming pattern which sort of looks out of line. I saw it in an old 60s song and thought it was worth playing with. I think the song has potential when its tidied up.

Lyrics: 

No Colour in your hair, it s hardly fair
I dont see a trace
Strange the way you dress,
complete and utter mess
bet you dont care?
No one to make your best
Maybe its a test
Will you wear his ring
Could be anything
Altogether sing
what wil you bring
Will you wear his ring
Could be anything
Here and there you go
still Saying its not so
Never feel a thing
Will you still wear his ring.

Broken heart again, tears in the rain
Never be the same
Gone without a trace,
pain on your face
No happy smiles ,
for miles and miles
Will you wear his ring
Could be anything
Altogether sing
Still not sure what you bring
Will you wear his ring
Could be anything
Here and there you go
Saying its its not so
Never feel a thing
Will you wear his ring

People lead you everywhere, its so rare
Such a charming pair
With a Velvet glove
Sing a song of love
Violets and summertime
Maybe it is fine
Will you wear his ring
Never feel a thing
Altogether sing
Still not sure what you bring
Will you wear his ring
Could be anything
Here and there you go
Saying it is not so

Never feel a thing
Will you wear his ring



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Comments

Chip Withrow's picture

I love the orchestral choice of instruments. This is a haunting and mesmerizing song, and quite pretty too. Spooky and ambiguous lyrics and your vocal approach fits the words in a way that is sort of ominous yet pleasing, too.

kahlo2013's picture

I love the series of couplets that you used to build the story. Nice use of the hook. Your current voice actually fits this song perfectly given its haunting and calming kind of feel.

Jibbidy34's picture

There’s something about the rhythm of your writing here that struck me. It really got me into a 1 2 3 pattern from the off. Some good rhymes too

yes indeed - but somewhere late on i think i lost it and it became more standard. i am going to revisit this one - i can make this one much better