Sunday Blues

Sunday Blues

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Skirmish Prompt : Sunday

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Lyrics: 

C
the sun stopped shining on sunday
the day you took the sun away
now I know there will always be
dark days of clouds and rain
but don't know when I'll feel again
the warmth...
the warmth of the sun's rays

V1
never did I want our love to
play like a Sunday football game
where neither winners or losers
would come out unscathed
where damage from injuries
wouldn't heal in a matter of days
and crippling change could evolve
from deep acute pain

no I never did I want our love to
play like a Sunday football game

C
the sun stopped shining on sunday
the day you took the sun away
now I know there will always be
dark days of clouds and rain
but don't know when I'll feel again
the warmth...
the warmth of the sun's rays

V2
never could I be the wick that
would tame your weekend flame
where sparks flew uncontrolled
with no one home to blame
as fast wildfires engulfed
new uncharted domains
and old embers became
shadows of charred remains

no I never could I be the wick that
would tame your weekend flame

C
the sun stopped shining on sunday
the day you took the sun away
now I know there will always be
dark days of clouds and rain
but don't know when I'll feel again
the warmth...
the warmth of the sun's rays



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Scubed's picture

Oh, my! Such beautiful, intense lyrics! The football metaphor in the second verse is really powerful. Great skirmishing!

tcelliott's picture

I really like the first line of the chorus. It's excellent. And all the imagery makes this a vivid lyric. Verse two is especially well written, I think. From spark, to flame to wildfires and how it all connects to the wick. Good lyric, especially for a skirmish.

corinne54's picture

A very different take on the theme. Very well crafted lyrics.

OdilonGreen's picture

Very bitter, and also very clever - the analogy to a Sunday football game really makes great use of the prompt and runs with it (semi-pun somewhat intended). Compelling lyrics!

JWHanberry's picture

You paint a very dark Sunday here. Your lyric is very focused and clear about that. The imagery in the 2nd verse is very bold and effective. I hope your real Sunday was better. Wink

Cicpisces's picture

Nice lyrics. Verse two is very strong in imagery and metaphor. In the short time frame this is good writing. Dark side of Sunday's problems.

Jyllian's picture

I really love the comparison of your love to a Sunday football game ! Offers so much potential for other parallels -with the tackle, the yard lines, touchdowns. Great write!