A Rose with No Thorn

A Rose with No Thorn

Aging Ophelia's picture

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Liner Notes: 

just warming up.

Lyrics: 

you once picked a wild rose
by a cool country road
then broke off the thorns
to give smooth to your love

she took your bright flower
smiled with a tear in her eye:
before she felt the shorn stem
she hadn't known
she could love you

a rose with no thorn
do you remember
her heart was safe in your care
do you remember
a rose with no thorn

you offered a flower
she gave you her goodness
& all gentle ministries
she knew she always
could love you

a rose with no thorn
do you remember
her heart was safe in your care
do you remember
a rose with no thorn

your offered a ring
she gave you her beautiful trust
and her fine forgiveness
she knew she always
would love you

a rose with no thorn
do you remember
her heart was safe in your care
do you remember
a rose with no thorn
a rose with no thorn

do you remember
when her heart was safe in your care
do you remember
a rose with no thorn



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Comments

This is lovely and stands quite well as poetry. I'm not quite sure how to set this to music other than to simply do a reading over an acoustic guitar piece. No matter, you've created beauty.

Frances Smith's picture

Lovely. I always love lyrics with nature in, and this is beautiful, lovely imagery.

Tim Fatchen's picture

There's an ambiguity here, an unsettling shadow: it's the "do you remember" and the past tense. Why? What went wrong? Death? Disease? Divorce? Loss of memory? (the last, worse than death). Sweet, but...uneasy...
No, i can't hear what to put to it either, but you are warming up!

Klaus's picture

What I really like about this is that it kind of feels simple but it isn't. And that you use words like "rose" and "thorn", they are cliches, but not here. Can't help to notice the ambiguity @Tim Fatchen mentions and so I notice another one: who is the narrator here and what is his/her role in all this? But no analysis is needed to find mystical beauty in these lyrics.

barbara's picture

As Cinderella said, the flow is the thing here. The repetitions give an insistent quality to the otherwise wistful remembering. It's pretty clear there's been damage done. What a fine metaphor/gesture for safety and trust being implicitly promised. This song seems to be coming from the near disbelief phase of having that trust betrayed, though. I love the mirroring of the lines of the chorus.

Ferry Colyer's picture

Very intriguing. It's the details ("do you remember?") and the idea 'breaking off rose's thorns') that made for an exciting read to me. Warming up, you said?

sherrycanary's picture

This just blew me away.
Every word and image is a fairy tale of true love. Who has ever removed thorns of a rose for anyone? What an image!
I can't even imagine someone peeling me a grape Smile

Everything is the beautiful fairy take until her fine forgiveness.

your offered a ring
she gave you her beautiful trust
and her fine forgiveness
she knew she always
would love you

This is how the story unfolded. What happened between she gave you her beautiful trust and........ her fine forgiveness.
So many stories could be written...or projected on to this.

Totally beautiful poetry, and captivating

You are aging masterfully, my dear.

katpiercemusic's picture

Beautiful sentiment. It reminds me of the folk revival of the 60s. This is a wonderful "warm up" as you call it.