Who's Drivin' This Thing?

Who's Drivin' This Thing?

Jibbidy34's picture
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Liner Notes: 

One of my biggest loves is writing and performing country music...I got challenged by my mentor to write a song for Taylor Swift...I can imagine this more for U.K country pop duo 'The Shires' - you decide! I have a conference call with a Nashville guy called Mark Cawley next week and have to send him two of my best country writes in advance....how will I ever decide which are good enough?

Anyway - this is today's write!

I had written a slightly sassier bridge:
'We’ve already impressed each other
Now come over here let’s get under the covers'
(I figure Taylor might sing it though thought I'd play it safe on here! Should I have left it in? It also sounds like the singer is taking charge which would defeat the purpose of 'who?' :D)

Lyrics: 

WHO’S DRIVIN' THIS THING?
(c) 2018 Georgie Cooper
All Rights Reserved

VERSE
All that time I thought you were quiet
You were waitin’ for a cue from me
But all that time when I was sayin’ nothin’
I was waiting for a cue from you

PC
So each one of us sittin' there next to the other
Neither one sayin' a word
Now it seems absurd
Looking back on those days
If I could say to those lovers hey! hey!

CHORUS
Who’s drivin' this thing?
Neither one of us wants to take the lead
Who’s drivin' this thing?
I’m lookin' to you - you’re lookin' to me
But neither one of us is gonna steer
So who’s got their hand on the wheel? Well?
Who’s drivin' this thing?
Who’s drivin' this thing?

VERSE
Each time you said somethin' kind of odd
Or I said somethin' awkward
I kept thinkin' somethin' here might be off
But both of us were bein' inward

PC
So each one of us wondrin’ is it me or the other
Neither one sayin' a word
Now it seems absurd
Lookin' back on those days
If I could say to those lovers hey! hey!

CHORUS
Who’s drivin' this thing?
Neither one of us wants to take the lead
Who’s drivin' this thing?
I’m lookin' to you - you’re lookin' to me
But neither one of us is gonna steer
So who’s got their hand on the wheel? Well?
Who’s drivin' this thing?
Who’s drivin' this thing?

BRIDGE
Let’s just be ourselves
Drop the invisible shackles
Neither one of us knew
Can’t go back in time so darlin’ what should we do?

CHORUS
Who’s drivin' this thing?
Neither one of us wants to take the lead
Who’s drivin' this thing?
I’m lookin' to you - you’re lookin' to me
But neither one of us is gonna steer
So who’s got their hand on the wheel?
Are we gonna take turns?
One way or another we have to learn
Who’s drivin' this thing?
Who’s drivin' this thing?
Who’s drivin' this thing?

This big ol’ rusty truck called love



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Comments

That's a good take on the modern country/TSwift sort of style. The edgier bridge certainly fits the genre but it breaks the "who's driving" motif--- unless of course it's answering the question! Bobbing my head along to the song. Nice. "This big ol' rusty truck called love" is a great tag line on the outro.

billwhite51's picture

the sassy lyric on the bridge does seem to contradict the rest of the song, so i would leave it out. if this is going to nashvikke, i would dare to mae two suggestions..and only because of the market. consider using more everyday words than the awkward and inward rhyme. and the chorus line neither of us wants to take the lead could use a bit more melody. on the whole, this is an excellent song in every way.. Great title, sung in an infectious manner with superior melodies throughout and above all a fantastic rhythm..really pushes the lyrics along as well as encouraging dancing. if you choose to restore the bridge, you might consider giving the other persons conflicting desire. maybe the singer wants to go faster and the person she is singing to wants to slow down. just ideas, responses to a first listen. good luck with it. it has the makings of a hit and there are people in nashville with ears.

wobbie wobbit's picture

lovely energy. I agree the sassier bridge would take it away from the question. Nice how it is imo. well done again Smile

MarkG's picture

You got the hook! Love the image of the truck going down the road, nobody's hands are on the wheel. Will you stay on the road? Crash? Run out of gas? Lots of fun.

Definitely has cool contemporary country rock sound. And that's a good hook for sure. I think a good call for not going with the sassier bridge cause it seems like total 180 on the meaning of the song. This is pretty solid though. A good write for sure. EDIT: And good luck in Nashville. How cool is that!

kahlo2013's picture

Hey! This is fantastic! The chucking is very effective and the hook is really strong and relatable with great analogy. So true that so many relationships stall or fall apart as no one is really driving effectively. Awesome vivid image in the bridge! Strong vocals! And thrilled to hear about the upcoming chat with someone in Nashville! Wishing you the best!!! Cheering you on enthusiastically!!!!

standup's picture

That chorus is powerful. And good advice, let's just be ourselves.

TheTau's picture

You nailed this one. Great hook.
It's the singer that's driving this thing

Smile

crisp1's picture

Love what you came up with here. Great idea for a lyric and an excellent execution! I mean, you absolutely killed it! Wink