Smoke

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Smoke

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Great prompt! I cannot decide whether I am thrilled or embarrassed with my work on this one though! Smile

Lyrics: 

Smoke
September 1, 2017
http://parksandrececommerce.com/JohnStaplesMusic-50-90/JohnStaples-Smoke.mp3

he was just some bloke
and they barely spoke
she ignored the smoke
and she got burned
she got burned

they were gentlefolk
never misspoke
they ignored the smoke
but felt the burn
felt the burn

can't see through it
can't undo it
as it billows
through your mind
when the smoke
consumes your vision
everything looks black and white
black and white

when we finally awoke
nothing left to do but choke
we ignored the smoke
and we all burned
we all burned

can't see through it
can't undo it
as it billows
through your mind
when the smoke
consumes your vision
everything looks black and white

can't see through it
can't undo it
as it billows
through your mind
when the smoke
consumes your vision
everything looks black and white
black and white
black and white

© 2017 John Staples JohnStaplesMusic.com



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Comments

corinne54's picture

You should definitely NOT be embarrassed by this! Great skirmish effort, John.

edsmaron's picture

I think you should be thrilled. Always doing fine work and splendid guitar playing.

kahlo2013's picture

This is really wonderful - great use and development of the skirmish prompt! You really played with the smoke/fire theme well to develop a tenuous relationship. And as always such wonderful music and delivery. I'm always so impressed with your writing and musical sensibility. This is amazingly good!

oneslowtyper's picture

Make that three votes for thrilled, John. I could see these words as a warning for us all, about getting burned by always talking about the "smoke" surrounding everything Trump, when we need to start talking about the fire.
When you play guitar and sing, it feels and sounds as natural as breathing.

Scubed's picture

I love these evocative lyrics, John! This is definitely a keeper. Fantastic skirmishing!

AndyGetch's picture

sounds like wisps trailing through the air, well done!

tamsnumber4's picture

can't see through it
can't undo it
as it billows
through your mind

This is such an amazing write and perspective on this skirmish, I just love it !!

musicsongwriter's picture

Fantastic lyrics and music John, of course you should be thrilled with the results. Beautiful singing and playing. Very poignant song. Sad reflection to what happened.

colgoo's picture

This is glorious! Fantastic lyrics. And your rhymes with smoke were great. Folk is not a very obvious rhyme, but you sure made it work here.