Chandeliers and Fire Pits

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Chandeliers and Fire Pits

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Skirmish Prompt:
CHANDELIERS
CANDLES
CANDLELABRAS

Lyrics: 

C
sarah loved
chandeliers and candles
in silver candelabras
while dining on
French foie gras

heather loved
fire pits and flashlights
in forests by mackinaw
while devouring
sweet coleslaw

PC
sarah sipped white Chardonnay
bought new Jaguar XEs
heather chugged Black Husky IPA
drove a rusty Toyota Camry

V1
sarah met heather in Aspen
one night after sarah skied
heather was the staff called
to massage Sarah's feet
sarah laid her head back
and barely opened her eyes
but when her eyes met heather's
there was no compromise...

V2
sarah spent the winter
discrete in heather's company
heather gave sarah all she had
plus her heart for eternity
when the ski season ended
sarah said thank you and good bye
like winter they were over
heather walked away and cried

PC
heather chugged Black Husky IPA
drove a rusty Toyota Camry
sarah sipped white Chardonnay
bought new Jaguar XEs

C
heather loved
fire pits and flashlights
in forests by mackinaw
while devouring
sweet coleslaw

sarah loved
chandeliers and candles
in silver candelabras
while dining on
French foie gras



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Comments

famouspatrick's picture

Nice lyric. The moral would maybe be: "Be wary of mixing candles and flashlights - it's never fun at the end of the season."

tcelliott's picture

Wow. I'm super impressed with this one. I love it. The bookends of the chorus and the way you let the story unfold. This is a straight up good one. And in an hour, to boot.

Acousticmaddie's picture

Fantastic lyrics also a very creative use of the theme. I like it a lot

Silver Machine's picture

Interesting lyric!
Man, I got it all wrong, I got the names mixed up and thought they got turned on by the others tastes and so adopted them when they broke up.
Anyway that's the rich for you, spoilt and selfish. Good story and well written.

owl's picture

Nice storytelling and I like the alliteration you used in the chorus!

Jyllian's picture

This is a fantastic love story. I really enjoyed it - felt like I was right with them, and liked the pacing. Great lyrics.