Player In A House Of Cards (demo at *22190 )

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Player In A House Of Cards (demo at *22190 )

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I feel
Like this metaphor may be too overused. What do you think?

PLEASE GO TO DEMO! Rocking good!!!

http://fiftyninety.fawmers.org/song/22190

Lyrics: 

V1
you stack the deck
you count the cards

you call the bluff
you gamble hard

don't hit me between the sheets
then ante up with talk so sweet

C
you're a player
in a house of cards
you're a player
in a lover's heart

you're a player
(you're a player)

V2
you deal the deuce
you up the bet

you mark the ace
you take all you get

don't deal me another blow
leave the table, let me go

C
you're a player
in a house of cards
you're a player
in a lover's heart

you're a player
(you're a player)

B
deal me a straight flush of hearts
and we could be a winning pair
because I am too..a player here
yeah, I'm not going to fold
I'm going for all of the chips
and my own pot of gold

C
we are players
in a house of cards
we are players
in our lovers' heart

we are players
(we are players)

OUTRO
we are players
(you're a player, I'm a player)
we are players
(you're a player, I'm a player)
let me play with you...



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Comments

Unkept's picture

The switch to the lead character also being a "player" was great, and I enjoy a song that touches on love but isn't sappy or worshiping a pure concept of what love is.

Great writing!

cindyrella's picture

This will be a super rock song! Love the concept and this is great writing!

Valerie Cox's picture

I like cards, and I like this. Short, punchy lines. Well developed concept. Excellent, effective repeats of the hook. This is very good.

Ferry Colyer's picture

Creative writing this is! I especially like the line 'because I am too..a player here'... I didn't see that coming, it gives such a good twist to the lyrics imo.

tiller2's picture

Well crafted. Your lyric reminded me of an essay on poker, written by playwright David Mamet. In discussing his long experience with the card game and especially a regular poker group he was in, Mamet asks why experienced poker players nonetheless overplay their hands--that is, stay in the game when the strict odds say they should fold. The answer, he says, is "because they want to be beloved of God." That is, on some level, they want to be blessed, delivered, granted a personal gift against the odds. That might make a good twist in a song about poker, even if a lover was the god/goddess at issue. Digression over, your song, again, is well made and I like the double-play on "player." Maybe an old-fashioned musical setting (soul? Motown?) would be good for a new take on a well-used metaphor... I'll go check the demo and see what you've come up with! Cheers