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Lyrics: 

we're so afraid
that we don't speak
so unstable in a dream we can't believe

we run so high
that we drown in empty
so unfitting in a life that we don't see

but watch me

you thought it was magic
write off chance like static
though I'd erase with analogy and see an end
a purpose

and the thing
was to go all the way
and the way it all led we didn't know

but it ain't no pilgrimage
it ain't no dreamland
and it ain't heaven when you're dead either

instead

it was the dance

of fingertips in sand
of the drifting of words in an unknown land
it was the clouded moments
reflected in water below
it was a never goodbye
that only said hello

we're so afraid
that we don't speak
so unstable in a dream we can't believe
we run so high
that we drown in empty
so unfitting in a life that we don't see

©2017 SueAwesome



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tcelliott's picture

That's a very interesting structure and rhyme scheme. I like the message and how you convey it. I get the feeling you can hear this one in your head. If feels almost tangible.

Stephen Wordsmith's picture

Lovely poetic style, and the message is clear despite the content being a fluid mix of clouds and contradictions. Enjoyed this.

kahlo2013's picture

Very poetic in structure and use of language and imagery. Really lovely insightful sentiment. I especially like the last two stanzas.