Enough About Us

kahlo2013's picture

Enough About Us

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Liner Notes: 

Trying new structure.
What do you think?

Lyrics: 

C
inviting
suspicious
intriguing
dangerous
unnerving
scandalous
revealing
slanderous

L
is that enough about us?
is that enough about us?

B1
discrete propositions
insightful intuitions
compromised positions
scathing admissions

L
is that enough?

V1
discrete propositions
uttered in the dark
secret conversations

inviting
suspicious

V2
insightful intuitions
circling like a shark
pointed assumptions

intriguing
dangerous

V3
compromised positions
observed clear and stark
released inhibitions

unnerving
scandalous

V4
scathing admissions
fired at the mark
exposed intentions

revealing
slanderous

L
is that enough?

B2
secret conversations
pointed assumptions
released inhibitions
exposed intentions

L
is that enough about us?
is that enough about us?

C
inviting
suspicious
intriguing
dangerous
unnerving
scandalous
revealing
slanderous

O
I've had enough



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Comments

Acousticmaddie's picture

Interesting tryout. For me I cant feel the natural rhyme so I would be very interested to hear if you put music in it. Great and creative work. NIce done!

cindyrella's picture

Love that title lady! I love it when you use powerful short lines-very effective.

colgoo's picture

Sounds like a punk rock/heavy metal song to me!