I can't write a song

Max in the Woods's picture

I can't write a song

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Demo: 

Collaborators: 

Liner Notes: 

Lyrics only now, but Wobbie will be doing the music.
Updated 7/8: I love the music Wobbie did for these lyrics! Thank you, my friend! Smile

I had never written a song before, only fiction. Wobbie has been encouraging me to give this a try and it's my first effort. Thanks, Wobs!

Wobbie: Congratulations Max on your first song! a bit kronky vocals and a simple treatment but it gets us both out of the stables eh?
very happy to collaborate with you Smile

Lyrics: 

I can’t write a song
you tell me it’s so easy
but the words don’t appear
it’s making me feel queasy

Your encouragement is great
but I think you’re wrong
I can do a lot of things
but I can’t write a song

my prose isn’t poetic
my writing’s never lyric-y
I’m just too scientific
I’ve studied this empirically

Your encouragement is great
but I think you’re wrong
I can do a lot of things
but I can’t write a song

I don’t have any rhythm
I don’t have any rhyme
Where is this even going
I’m running out of time

Your encouragement is great
but I think you’re wrong
I can do a lot of things
but I can’t write a song

What have I just done here
My imagination is alight
I just wrote a song
You were fucking right.

Your encouragement is great
but you knew it all along
I can do a lot of things
I can even write a song



Please keep your comments respectful, honest, and constructive. Please focus on the song and not the demo.

Comments

TheTau's picture

Me too... Exactly what I been thinkin
Russ Dirol

wobbie wobbit's picture

i will get on this at the weekend max! so happy to have spurred you onto you first song!!! I love Lyric-y empirically verse and oh the tears of triumph of "you were fucking right"

TheTau's picture

Give me a heads up on this one.
Russ Dirol

siebass's picture

Really dig the theme on this one. Anyone can write a song, great job! Looking forward to hearing the music. It's all about getting the pen to paper, or fingers to the keyboard, as it were.

My favorite lines were the lyric-y and the "you were fucking right"

AndyGetch's picture

ooooh, wonderful story turnaround; EDIT: 7/8/17: wonderful job on the music!

Acousticmaddie's picture

Very funny and you are wrong you can both write and perform a song Smile You have a very cool voice btw.

tcelliott's picture

What a great lyric about a place we've all been at some point. And this performance is damn fine. It's good all around.

writeandwrong's picture

Aww, this is awesome! I love this! Congratulations on your first song and I love what Wobbie did with it!! Superb!! Smile

Haha - how many of us have felt like this! Ironic twist

headfirstonly's picture

The drop into the major key at the end is like the Sun coming out. Glorious! Triumph! Yay!

This ought to be 50/90's theme song. So true, so true (you should hear the stuff I wrote when I first started FAWMing. No, on second thoughts, cancel that - you *really* wouldn't want to hear what I used to sound like...)

standup's picture

Hey, fun song. This is the kind of song-about-songwriting that's fun. I love the dawning realization near the end, suddenly ending on an upbeat major chord.