The Phoenix

barbara's picture

The Phoenix

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Struggled over the approach to this, many ways over during many attempts since I got bumped into my earlier spot. I loved the kind of disturbing phoenix theme in @Vom Vorton's morph song *18478, with the application of it to a seemingly amorphous self-destructive urge after abandonment (ymmv). I researched the myth of the phoenix on Wikipedia for ideas. For awhile I thought I would keep the title/theme and use exactly the same chord progression and tempo, but I don't write so well to existing music. So here's what helped: I eventually chucked the chords and took a lyric-cloud approach.

I extracted what seemed to me to be the key meaning words (that came to 42); then I selected the 21 of those that appealed the most to me for inclusion. I wrote without other constraints until I had used them all, building the song around the mythological idea that there is ever only one phoenix at any one time, said to be born out of the flames/ashes of the one before it after its death by fire, and then I put a mother-daughter/death spin on it (with a healthy dose of unresolved competition/individuation).

I tried to stick with 120bpm, but it was just a little too fast, so this is at 115 instead.

Oh yeah, the overlapping vocals were a must!! Smile

garageband on the iphone (headphone mixed)

(lifted this reference idea from Helen):
This is a morph song - see here for details http://fiftyninety.fawmers.org/content/morphs

1 - AndyGetch - http://fiftyninety.fawmers.org/song/16705
2 - pipewrench67 - http://fiftyninety.fawmers.org/song/16889
3 - john crossman - http://fiftyninety.fawmers.org/song/17511
4 - iveg - http://fiftyninety.fawmers.org/song/17789
5 - Jamkar - http://fiftyninety.fawmers.org/song/17869
6 - Helen - http://fiftyninety.fawmers.org/song/18036
7 - Vom Vorton - http://fiftyninety.fawmers.org/song/18478

Lyrics: 

“The Phoenix”
(a morph song)
9.28.2016

I can’t see… what you saw
I can’t hear... what you heard
just the whispers of fuel
and your flickering words

I resist the flames of goodnight
I have been consumed by your light
you have burned your name, hot and bright
into my soul
but I will rise from this veil of smoke
if you will explain before you go
the love in your eyes behind a deep disguise
now they’re glowing like coals

I can’t be… what you wanted to be
and I can’t feel… what you hoped you would feel
and now you’ve become the embers that float along
on a breeze

I will take my turn on the stage, (it seems that)
I can’t live my life until we turn that page
but it will be your warmth that will fuel my rage
‘til I make my peace
but I will rise from this veil of smoke
if you would explain before you go
the love in your eyes behind a deep disguise
now they’re glowing like coals

I lift my voice… as I try on these wings
the terrible choice of which the phoenix bird sings
knowing there’s only one (there’s only one…)
and until she’s undone
knowing there’s only one (there’s only one…)
and until she’s undone
knowing there’s only one (there’s only one…)
and until she’s undone
the other won’t come



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Comments

Rob From Amersfoort's picture

You can't hear the struggle it turned out to be a beautiful song! The concept of the phoenix is a strong one, and the overlapping vocals at the end work out well!

corinne54's picture

All I know is - you've written a wonderful song. What a brilliant angle for the lyrics. You are really a fine songwriter.

garner's picture

i was looking for other Garageband iPhone/iPad users ... this is wonderfully beautiful ... very soft and mellow ... i really enjoy the toms and the piano with the sparse guitar .. has a movie soundtrack quality ... my favorite lyrics are "but I will rise from this veil of smoke/if you will explain before you go/the love in your eyes behind a deep disguise/now they’re glowing like coals" ... i love the vocal layers at the end of the song ... excellent job!

Klaus's picture

This is beautiful. For me it reminds my mother. She was a handful! Very well written, being so universal and yet emotionally accurate. ( Might even work as break-up song. ) Piano and guitar are wonderfully 70s singer-songwriterly supporting confessional tone. Gentle melody flows nicely and your singing is great. Overlapping vocals heighten the heartbreak. Usually overlaps are just melodic or a gimmick but not in this case.

Vom Vorton's picture

Oh hey, not sure how I missed this! Thanks for the kind words on my morph. Love how you've taken the phoenix idea in a whole other direction, this is really powerful and there are some lovely images in the lyrics. Your vocal layers are fantastic! Agreed with Klaus about the 70s singer-songwriter vibes.